Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Bill,

I am writing this letter to express my interest regarding working from our company's head office in Paris. I got enthuastic when I saw over company's post regarding needing an individual to fill a temporary position.

I would like to take some time and explain why I would be a great fit for this role. As, it is a short term position I would only be gone for six months of time. I am also bilingual and I can understand and speak french which would be really cruicial for a candidate who takes that role. I would also gain experience while working there, which would be benificial for me personally as I will have a chance to improve my skills and learn new aspects of what the work has to offer which might also be advantageous for our office.

Furthermore, for the time I am gone my duties can be fulfilled by the intern which I was training recently. As, I believe he is aware about my duties and the roles which I carry out through out the week and he is also helping me on my current prject. I believe he would be the perfect fit to take my role until I am gone.

I will really appreciate your time and your thoughts regarding this oppurtunity. If you have some time we can arrange a meeting later this week to discuss about this situation and arrangements to be done if you are willing for me to go and work at our head office. I hope to hear from you soon.

Your Sincerely,

Sara

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly explained your motivation for the transfer, proposed a viable solution for your current workload by mentioning the intern, and requested a meeting to discuss the logistics. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are slightly more developed; for instance, you could have elaborated on how your bilingual skills would specifically benefit the head office team beyond just being 'crucial'. Overall, the task is fully addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each requirement, and a professional closing. You use transition signals such as 'Furthermore' and 'In addition' to guide the reader. However, some cohesive devices are used slightly awkwardly, such as starting sentences with 'As,' followed by a comma, which is grammatically incorrect and disrupts the flow. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate the different requirements of the task, which helps the reader follow your argument easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'temporary position', 'bilingual', and 'advantageous'. However, there are several spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'enthuastic' (enthusiastic), 'cruicial' (crucial), 'benificial' (beneficial), 'prject' (project), and 'oppurtunity' (opportunity). These errors are noticeable and detract from the professional quality of the letter. While the meaning is always clear, the frequency of these spelling mistakes prevents a higher score in this category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are, however, consistent grammatical issues. For example, the misuse of 'As' at the beginning of sentences ('As, it is a short term position...') and the incorrect preposition usage in 'discuss about this situation' (discuss this situation). Additionally, there are minor punctuation errors and issues with article usage. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to limit the score to a 6.0.

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