Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Respected sir,

I am writing for Requesting to allowing me to work six month in our head office london.I belive this experience would be heighly benificial for my proffesional development and would also allow me to gain better undarstanding of the company's international operations which also benificial for our office when i will return.

The important reason for work at the head office is to gain practical experience of internatinal level,also gain various technicall skills from our seniour executives and chair person.As i am in company since seven year i can get better knowledge about future visoin of our company,some new venture which is launching in next two year,further more i wolud like to learn more abour company's management practice and international projects which will be more valuable to our team when i return.

I would be ensure that there is not any inconvience happen in absense of me,i would be available online when needed,also i will be available for our routine online work,mailing,excel sheet,presentaion sheet preparation through our online web system.if there is any work which require in person present which i will give all the list,preparation hand over to my coulleague befor leaving.i would be available online douring our office hours.

I would be so gratefull if you could help me to arrange this temporary transfer and give recomandation of me to our head office management and guide me about process and any documantation requirements.i would be happy to hear from you.

Yours Sincerely,

Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: explaining the reason for the request, outlining how work will be managed, and asking for assistance. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive, particularly regarding the benefits of the transfer. To improve, ensure that each point is distinct and fully expanded. While the purpose is clear, the overall structure of the arguments could be more concise to avoid redundancy, which would help in achieving a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which is a positive feature. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, phrases like 'further more' and 'also' are used frequently to link ideas, but the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'if there is any work which require in person present which i will give all the list'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the logical flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, but there are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'heighly', 'benificial', 'proffesional', 'undarstanding', 'technicall', 'seniour', 'visoin', 'coulleague', 'douring', 'recomandation'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. While you attempt to use professional terminology like 'international operations' and 'temporary transfer', the persistent spelling mistakes and occasional word choice inaccuracies (e.g., 'in person present') limit your score. Focusing on proofreading and learning the correct spelling of common professional terms will significantly improve your performance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some new venture which is launching'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'I am writing for Requesting'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing commas. While your meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents a higher score. You should focus on mastering basic sentence patterns and checking for subject-verb agreement before moving on to more complex structures.

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