Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to express my genuine interest to work in company's head office for six months.

There are many reasons why I want to work in the company's central office. First, it will aid to the company in various ways in addition to my personal growth. I can learn new things, basic procedures and new skills that will ultimately help to deal with problems that our company facing and it will reduce the dependency relying on the main office. In addition, it will aid to improve our image and stand out from all other companies. Moreover, I can teach the my coworkers what I will learn during my stay at main office so we can create a professional team in our institute.

I will also make arrangement for my own work. As I can work remotely using my laptop online. Additionally, I will train two persons from our organization to deal with situations in my absence.

I am requesting your support to make an arrangement for my visit to main office. It will need your permission and initiation to contact the head office for my journey.

I hope you will consider my request. I promise to bring some unique skills that will useful for the company progress.

Yours faithfully,

Meet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly explained the motivation for the transfer, proposed a practical solution for your current workload, and made a polite request for assistance. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. To reach a higher band, ensure your ideas are more fully developed. For instance, instead of saying you will 'train two persons', you could briefly mention the specific handover process or the documentation you plan to prepare. This would demonstrate a more professional and proactive approach, which is expected in a business context.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with clear paragraphing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the task, which helps the reader follow your argument easily. You use some cohesive devices such as 'First', 'In addition', and 'Moreover'. However, some of these transitions feel a bit mechanical. To improve, try to vary your linking phrases and ensure that the flow between sentences is smoother. For example, in the second paragraph, the transition between the benefits to the company and the benefits to your team could be more fluidly connected to improve the overall cohesion of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. You use business-related terms like 'professional team', 'remotely', and 'organization'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'aid to the company' (should be 'aid the company') and 'dependency relying on' (which is redundant). To achieve a higher score, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing. Expanding your vocabulary to include more sophisticated business terminology would also be beneficial for this type of task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'interest to work' (should be 'interest in working'), 'help to deal with problems that our company facing' (missing 'is'), and 'that will useful' (missing 'be'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do show a lack of consistent control over complex structures. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of infinitives and relative clauses.

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