Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing to express my interest in relocation to our head office for a short duration. I am believing that these moments might help to foster my long term career.

The reason I would like to work at Singapore head office is because I always admire the leadership and work life balance from our leaders. Therefore, I want to closely monitor their working methods and work-life balance with their daily routine. These behaviours is essential to become a successful leader. Furthermore, i feel that these skills are significant to inculcate my personal and professional growth.

As you know my self and Amit work on the ABC project, since we both completed 3/4 of the work, rest he will be taking care of all the future responsibilities. Moreover, I can assure you that without any further delay data will be submitted before the due date.

I will be

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for the request, the handover plan, and the request for assistance. However, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly with 'I will be'. This lack of a proper closing and the unfinished sentence significantly impacts the task completion. While the ideas are relevant, the development is somewhat limited by the abrupt ending. To improve, ensure you include a formal closing and a clear call to action, such as requesting a meeting to discuss the proposal further. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a manager, though the abrupt conclusion prevents a fully successful response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Therefore', and 'Moreover' to link ideas. However, the flow is interrupted by the incomplete final sentence, which leaves the reader hanging. Additionally, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. To improve, ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next and that the letter reaches a logical conclusion. The use of referencing is generally clear, but the overall coherence is undermined by the unfinished state of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with some attempts at more sophisticated language such as 'foster', 'inculcate', and 'relocation'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'I am believing' (which should be 'I believe') and 'inculcate my personal and professional growth' (inculcate is usually used with values or habits, not growth). While the meaning is generally clear, the range is somewhat limited and there are occasional inaccuracies in word choice that prevent a higher score. Focusing on more natural collocations will help improve this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'These behaviours is essential' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'my self' (should be 'myself'). The phrase 'I am believing' is an incorrect use of the continuous form for a stative verb. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To reach a higher band, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of verb tenses. The unfinished sentence at the end also represents a significant grammatical and structural error.

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