Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr.Smith,

I am writing to request your approval for allowing me to spend six months at our company head office in Singapore.

Since past six years I am working with the company as a Senior Control Officer and I believe that, it’s time for me to take extra responsibilities to foster my professional career. Hence, I would like to work with other senior colleagues to monitor their technique towards the team building and frequently achieving 100% accuracy. Moreover, this changes might also help me to build my confident while meeting higher level leaders and admiring their work life balance.

While I am away from the India office, I would still work to manage all the required work load and project responsibilities virtually. Incase of any physical assistance, I am willing to train any one of our team members.

Lastly, I would be grateful if you can get confirmation from Human Resources and Singapore management team to fast forward the process and I would also highly appreciate your advices regarding other formalities.

I hope to receive favourable response from you.

Yours sincerely,

Anjali Reddy

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly explain your motivation for the transfer, propose a viable solution for your current workload, and request assistance with the administrative process. The tone is appropriate for a formal business request. To reach a higher band, ensure your ideas are slightly more developed; for instance, you could provide more specific details on how your virtual work would be monitored or what specific skills you hope to bring back to the India office. Overall, the purpose of the letter is clear and the requirements are fully met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a formal closing. You use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Hence', and 'Lastly' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more distinct to separate the different requirements of the task. The progression of ideas is generally smooth, and the reader can easily follow your request from start to finish. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words to connect sentences more naturally rather than relying on standard transition markers at the start of every paragraph.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using professional terms like 'professional career', 'physical assistance', and 'favourable response'. There are some minor collocation errors, such as 'Since past six years' (should be 'For the past six years') and 'build my confident' (should be 'build my confidence'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for a higher band. Attempting to use more precise collocations and avoiding basic word-choice errors would elevate your score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are several grammatical inaccuracies that occur throughout the text, such as 'this changes might also help' (should be 'these changes') and 'advices' (advice is an uncountable noun). Additionally, there are minor punctuation issues, such as the comma placement after 'I believe that'. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct usage of uncountable nouns will help improve your accuracy.

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