Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear manager,

I hope you are in good spirits. I am writing this letter to you because I am planning to move in Toronto for six months. Although the head office is located near my place in Toronto and I want to work over there for six months, if you allow me.

The thing is that I am moving due to my personal reasons. Also my sister is living there, and she is suffering from homesickness and I wanna help her. In addition, I can do my job with full honesty as I am doing now. I promise you that all the tasks will be completed before you need. Moreover, while working at head office i will gain some experience that will be helpful for my future promotions. If it is possible can you please refer me for head office for only half a year.

This will help me to keep me on track without getting holidays and I will do my all work job properly as its just a shifting to another place not the job. You have very good contact me the head office manager if you will help me, please give my name once. I really will be thankful for you support and i know you always help me no matter what please one more time I will really appreciate it.

Your kind

Karanveer

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, proposing how work will be handled, and asking for assistance. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. The explanation regarding the sister's homesickness is personal and slightly informal for a professional request. The proposal for how work will be managed is vague, relying on general promises rather than a concrete plan. The tone is inconsistent, shifting between professional and overly casual, which impacts the effectiveness of the communication. To improve, focus on maintaining a formal, professional tone and providing more specific details about how your responsibilities will be maintained while abroad.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow between ideas is sometimes mechanical or disjointed. For example, the transition between the personal reason for moving and the professional promise to complete tasks is abrupt. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'In addition' and 'Moreover', they are sometimes used in ways that do not perfectly fit the logical progression of the argument. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the final paragraph where the request for the manager to contact the head office is phrased in a confusing manner.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and professional register required for a formal business letter. Phrases like 'wanna help her' and 'do my all work job' are informal and grammatically awkward. There is some attempt to use more advanced vocabulary, such as 'promotions' and 'experience', but the overall range is limited. To reach a higher band, you should avoid colloquialisms and focus on using more professional collocations appropriate for a workplace request, such as 'professional development' or 'remote work arrangements'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'move in Toronto' (should be 'to'), 'if you allow me' (a sentence fragment), and 'do my all work job' (incorrect word order). Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are inconsistent throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common grammatical slips would significantly improve the quality of your writing.

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