Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
- say how your work could be done while you are away
- ask for his/her help in arranging it
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Manager,
I am writing to you letter related this situation. so, I would like to work in another country company as head office for half months of year . It will be help me to learning different skills from other nations like with new employees of the company who they are work. Moreover, in aboard company's has different background people then it helps me to give a chance of learning multicultural languages as well as gain experience. In Future want to open any work then it is beneficial for me. However, I will connecting with you through the internet like video call, audio call, emails, and message every time . Can you please support me to arrangment of this problem. it is also asist you to know the different company secret thing through me.
I hope you give me positive reply related this letter and I really appericate to you.
Best Regards,
Manroop Kaur
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: the reason for the request, the plan for work coverage, and the request for assistance. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. The explanation of why you want to work at the head office is somewhat vague, and the plan for how work will be covered is not clearly articulated beyond mentioning digital communication. The tone is occasionally inappropriate for a formal business letter, such as referring to the request as a 'problem' and suggesting you could help the manager learn 'company secret things.' To improve, ensure your ideas are more professional and fully explained.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter is organized into a single block of text, which lacks proper paragraphing. While there is a basic attempt to sequence ideas, the progression is often disjointed. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'However,' but they are sometimes used incorrectly or in a way that does not logically connect the preceding and following sentences. For example, 'However' is used to introduce a solution, which is not a contrastive relationship. The lack of clear paragraph breaks makes the letter feel like a list of sentences rather than a cohesive piece of professional correspondence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and often inaccurate, which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'another country company' instead of 'the company's overseas branch' and 'arrangment of this problem' instead of 'assistance with this request.' The phrase 'company secret thing' is also unprofessional and imprecise. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use collocations correctly. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning business-related terminology and ensuring that your word choices are appropriate for a formal context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the message. There are consistent issues with verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. For example, 'who they are work' is grammatically incorrect, and 'it is also asist you' contains a spelling error and incorrect verb form. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper structure, such as 'I am writing to you letter related this situation.' While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering simple sentence structures before attempting more complex ones.
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