Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
- say how your work could be done while you are away
- ask for his/her help in arranging it
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Mr. Joy,
I hope this letter finds you well. I'm writing to request you give permission to work in the Canada country, where the head office is located.
Firstly, I'm interested to work there for six months, because I want to gain more experience and it would be beneficial for me to work in another country. In addition, if I work in the Canada I can learn abroad language and can understand different culture and backgrounds.
Secondly, in my absent Mercy will work behalf of me. I have already briefed her. If you have any issues regarding projects and work you can call me any times.
Finally, I would like to request you to please arrange my duties in the Canada country, so I can take new working experience and perform my work well. Your attention to this matter is greatly appreciated. I am looking forward to your positive response.
Yours sincerely,
Sofiya Roy
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state the purpose of the request, explain how your workload will be managed by Mercy, and ask for the manager's assistance. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of why you want to work in Canada is quite brief and could be expanded with more professional detail regarding how this experience would benefit the company, rather than just focusing on personal growth. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a manager, though some phrasing is slightly awkward.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on one of the required points. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'In addition', 'Secondly', and 'Finally' to signal the progression of your ideas. While these are functional, the transitions can feel a bit mechanical. The referencing is generally clear, although the sentence 'in my absent Mercy will work behalf of me' is slightly confusing due to the missing noun and preposition. Overall, the flow of information is easy to follow, meeting the requirements for a coherent response.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your request clearly. However, there are several instances of unnatural word choice and minor errors. For example, 'Canada country' is redundant; it should simply be 'Canada'. The phrase 'abroad language' is incorrect; 'foreign language' would be the standard collocation. Additionally, 'take new working experience' is not idiomatic. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise professional collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing. The current range is sufficient for the task but lacks the flexibility required for higher scores.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'I'm interested to work' (should be 'interested in working'), 'in my absent' (should be 'in my absence'), and 'work behalf of me' (should be 'work on my behalf'). There are also minor issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to limit your score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will help improve your accuracy.
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