Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Manager,

I want to ask about our company I want to do work in another country for six months because I want to explore new skills , understand other responsibilities and also I it’s would be best time for learning how to work with other companies colleges .

I will be complete my current work online through teams , video calls . Further, I can attend meetings online and communicate with team members through zoom meetings , video calls. Moreover, written work I can send remotely

.

Please ask to the head quarter for assigning me, so I can do work an international level .Make more future bright professionally and personally. Please request from my side and give me positive reply . I appreciate with regards . Thanks you for yours support .

Yours sincerely

Manpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for the request, the plan for work coverage, and the request for assistance. However, the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum, which limits the development of ideas. The explanation for wanting to work at the head office is quite brief, and the request for the manager's help is somewhat informal and lacks the professional tone expected in a formal business letter. To improve, you should expand on the specific skills you hope to gain and provide a more detailed, professional proposal for how your current responsibilities will be managed in your absence.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'Moreover, written work I can send remotely'. The progression of ideas is clear, but the transitions between sentences could be smoother. The letter lacks a professional closing structure, and the overall flow is hindered by the brevity of the sentences and the lack of sophisticated linking words to connect the ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying on simple terms like 'work', 'do', and 'ask'. There are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'colleges' instead of 'colleagues' and 'head quarter' instead of 'head office'. The phrase 'Make more future bright' is unidiomatic and lacks the professional register required for a formal letter to a manager. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to business and professional development, and ensure that word forms and collocations are used correctly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'I it’s would be best time', 'I will be complete my current work', and 'Please ask to the head quarter'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and periods. The errors in verb tense and sentence construction are frequent, which prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will significantly improve your accuracy.

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