Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to show my interest in working comapny's head office if you could help me to get this opportunity in my life.

There are ample of advantages of woring at head office. Firstlly, the employess would get a chance to know about all kind of micromanagements that are managing by head staff of the main office. Secondly, associates would have an opportunity to get in touch with senior staff, those who have gaind lots of experienced in the same field and company.

I will easily manage my work while I would be away. I will be in touch and connected with my manager and collauges to know about my daily work tasks and I will be done them remotlly. I will attempt all required meetings via goole meet or phone calls.

One of the assistance which is asked by me is tha Can I take my working equipments including laptop and cell phone with me? This would be a great help to accomplish my work on time while being away from my work place.

Yours Faithfully

Dhruv Kansara

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You explained your motivation for the transfer, outlined a plan for managing your workload remotely, and requested assistance with logistics. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of why you want to work at the head office is quite general and lacks specific professional context. Additionally, the request for help is phrased slightly awkwardly as 'One of the assistance which is asked by me'. To improve, ensure your ideas are more fully developed and professional in tone, and ensure the purpose of the letter is clearly articulated in the opening.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstlly' and 'Secondly' to structure your points. However, there are some issues with the flow and logical progression. Some sentences feel disjointed, and the transition between the request for the transfer and the logistics of the equipment is a bit abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph flows naturally into the next, rather than relying on simple list-like transitions.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several spelling errors ('comapny's', 'woring', 'employess', 'collauges', 'remotlly', 'goole') and some awkward collocations ('gaind lots of experienced', 'One of the assistance which is asked by me'). These errors occasionally distract the reader. To improve, you should focus on proofreading your work to catch common spelling mistakes and aim to use more precise professional terminology, such as 'professional development' instead of 'get in touch with senior staff'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there is a high frequency of grammatical errors. Examples include 'if you could help me to get this opportunity in my life', 'I will be done them remotlly', and 'tha Can I take'. These errors, particularly with verb forms and sentence construction, occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive versus active voice. Practicing basic sentence structure will help you reduce these frequent errors and improve your overall accuracy.

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