Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

good morning, i hope you are doing well, i am writing this letter for requesting you to transfer me to the the head office of our company in USA for six months only.

I really want to work on our head office in the USA for six month only because i want to get experience to work on high post which helps me to build my confidence. I am working here as a co-worker for this company, if i work 6 month in the head office, this time may count in my work experience or i can get more knowledge that how i can handle that stuff. I can check my compatibility while working in head office.

if you move me to the other country for work, i will continue my work through online meetings and work from home. I know it would be difficult for me top manage but i will do my best.

i come here with lots of hope, i am requesting you to help me to arrange all this, i a, not able to do this without your assistance.

thank you

your faithfully

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state the purpose of the request, propose a method for managing your workload (online meetings and working from home), and ask for the manager's assistance. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation of why you want to work at the head office is repetitive and lacks professional depth. To improve, focus on providing more specific professional benefits for both yourself and the company, rather than repeating the desire for 'experience' and 'confidence' multiple times. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal request, though it could be more polished.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your request. You use some basic cohesive devices, such as 'if' and 'because', to link ideas. However, the progression of ideas is occasionally hindered by repetitive phrasing and simple sentence structures. The use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical, and the transition between the request for the transfer and the plan for your current work could be smoother. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus without unnecessary repetition.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for a general task but remains quite basic. You rely on simple terms like 'stuff', 'work', and 'help', which limits the professional tone of the letter. There are also some minor errors in word choice, such as 'high post' instead of 'senior position' or 'higher-level role'. To improve, you should aim to incorporate more precise, business-oriented vocabulary. The spelling is generally accurate, but the range of vocabulary is not yet sufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher band scores.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'the the head office'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'I am writing this letter for requesting' instead of 'to request'), and punctuation errors, such as the lack of capitalization for 'I' and the start of sentences. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall flow and professional quality of the letter. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and proper sentence construction will significantly improve your score.

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