Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr Kapoor,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to express my interest in working in a head office of our company in Japan for six months.

I have been working as an assistant manager in this company for five years and now I want to explore new work environment. Therefore, I want to work in japan. Moreover, this opportunity will allow me to work with diverse cultural background employees and get in-depth knowledge regarding advanced software and work techniques in order to improve my productivity and for the development of professional skills.

When I will away from my workplace, all my responsibilities has been done my colleagues and provide them training for it. Additionally, I will try to stay connected with them via phone calls or emails when they encounter difficulties . Also, I will guide them and encourage them to overcome the difficulties and give their best for our company.

It would be appreciated it if you could recommend my name to our manager and request them to allows me to work in Japan for six months. Additionally, give them brief introduction about my achievements and contribution to progress of our organisation.

I hope you consider my request and provide me information about shifting in a new work placement soon, so I can start training to my colleagues and arrange important documents for the further process. I look forward to your positive response in this matter.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours faithfully,

Twinkle

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly state the purpose of the request, explain how your workload will be managed, and ask for the manager's assistance. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation of how your work will be covered is a bit vague, stating only that colleagues will do it without specifying a handover process or a clear plan. To improve, provide more concrete details about the transition of your responsibilities to demonstrate professional foresight.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with clear paragraphing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Additionally', and 'Therefore' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are instances where the flow is interrupted by grammatical errors, such as in the sentence 'When I will away from my workplace, all my responsibilities has been done my colleagues'. Improving the variety and natural placement of linking words would enhance the overall flow of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'diverse cultural background', 'in-depth knowledge', and 'professional skills'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'shifting in a new work placement' instead of 'transferring to a new position' and 'do my colleagues' instead of 'be handled by my colleagues'. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the vocabulary from reaching a higher band. Focus on learning common business collocations to sound more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the accuracy of your writing. For instance, 'When I will away' should be 'When I am away', and 'responsibilities has been done my colleagues' is grammatically incorrect and lacks a passive construction. Additionally, 'request them to allows me' contains a subject-verb agreement error. While the meaning remains clear, the frequency of these errors suggests a need for more careful proofreading, particularly regarding verb tenses and subject-verb agreement.

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