Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing great! I am Aayushi Vareliya, an employee of your company and working offshores from India. The purpose of writing this letter is to express my interest of working for six months in our head office.

Although, I am satisfied with my role at current location, however, I am also fascinated to learn more about our company and other useful skills. Moreover, knowing our head office located in UK, it has encourage me to visit and upgrade my skills while working with other employees. Meanwhile, I will get an opportunity to travel and know about the culture of UK as well.

Furthermore, I have already started training my colleague regarding my role at work to avoid any inconvenience during my absence. Adding to that, I will be available on teams for this location for guidance.

I would appreciate if you grant me the visit to the head office and allowance for six months of work experience. Looking forward to hear from you.

Thank you,

Aayushi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task effectively. You clearly explained your motivation for the transfer, outlined a plan for your current workload, and made a polite request for assistance. The tone is appropriate for a professional letter to a manager. To reach a higher band, you could provide more specific details about the 'useful skills' you hope to acquire or elaborate slightly more on how your training of a colleague will ensure a smooth transition. Overall, the purpose of the letter is clear and the response is well-focused.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into distinct paragraphs, each serving a clear purpose. You use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'Meanwhile' to link your ideas. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical or used incorrectly, such as 'Although... however' in the second paragraph, which is a redundant structure. Additionally, the reference 'for this location' in the third paragraph is slightly ambiguous. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that cohesive devices are used naturally would enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using professional terms like 'offshores', 'inconvenience', and 'upgrade my skills'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'grant me the visit' (which sounds slightly unnatural; 'approve my request' would be better) and 'working offshores' (usually 'working offshore'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Expanding your repertoire of professional collocations would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'knowing our head office located in UK' (missing 'is' and 'the'), 'it has encourage me' (should be 'encouraged'), and 'Looking forward to hear from you' (should be 'hearing'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of gerunds after certain phrases will help improve your accuracy.

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