Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Bill,

I am writing this letter to seek your help in order to work at the company's head office. As you know, I was offered a promotional position in our company. I am very determined to accept and work in that position, but in order to qualify for it. I need to have experience working at the head office for at least 4 months, which is in Vietnam.

While I will be away in Vietnam, I can work online to complete all of my paperwork on time rather than piling up a backlog. Apart from this, I had a conversation with my team asking them to pitch in for me if needed, and they were very supportive and were ready to cover in for me.

As you know, our head office is based in a different country. I do need a visa to get there. For this procedure, I need a letter of recommendation from my general manager, who is you. I request you to please issue me the letter, so I can start with my official application. Thank you for your time.

Yours sincerely,

Parmeet Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task effectively. You clearly explained the motivation for the transfer, proposed a viable solution for your workload, and made a specific request for a recommendation letter. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter. However, the development of your ideas is slightly brief. For instance, while you mention working online, providing a bit more detail on how you would manage time zone differences or specific project handovers would have strengthened the response. Overall, the purpose of the letter is clear and the requirements are fully met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a formal closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your argument easily. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Apart from this' and 'As you know' to link your ideas. However, the transition between the first and second paragraph could be smoother. The use of paragraphing is appropriate, and the overall progression of ideas is logical, making the letter easy to read and understand.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using business-appropriate terms like 'promotional position', 'backlog', and 'letter of recommendation'. There are no significant spelling errors, and your word choice is generally accurate. To reach a higher band, you could incorporate more sophisticated collocations or idiomatic business expressions. For example, instead of 'asking them to pitch in', you could use 'delegating tasks to my team'. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly and professionally throughout the letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While most of your sentences are clear, there are some minor grammatical slips. For example, the sentence 'I am very determined to accept and work in that position, but in order to qualify for it. I need to have experience...' contains a punctuation error where a full stop is used instead of a comma. Additionally, 'cover in for me' is slightly awkward; 'cover for me' would be more natural. Despite these minor issues, your grammar does not impede communication.

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