Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir/madam,

I am writing this letter to draw your immediate attention to my proposal on taking transfer to our head office for next six months.

As we all know we have seminar and training in the Canada. I am willing to get training for my better future in this company and give extra efforts for this company. We know that this training will occur for six months which will be from January to June. I want to go for my career growth.

Of course, I am far away from this current company but I will catch all my work through emails. I know it will take my an arm and a leg but, I will manage.

I have one more and last request that I already talked with management on this matter but can you please give your reference for approval, help me to arrange all the necessary documents and get flight ticket on onus of the company that will be very helpful for me.

I hope to hear from you on this.

your faithfully,

Manav Brahmbhatt

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: explaining the reason for the transfer, proposing a method for handling your workload, and requesting assistance with the logistics. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how your work will be managed is vague, and the tone is occasionally inappropriate for a formal request to a manager (e.g., 'I know it will take my an arm and a leg'). To improve, ensure your professional tone is consistent and provide more specific details regarding your current projects and how you plan to delegate or manage them remotely.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear opening and closing. Paragraphing is used to separate the different requirements of the task. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. For example, the transition between the request for training and the logistics of the work could be smoother. Some sentences feel disjointed, which affects the overall flow. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would help improve the progression of your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and professional tone required for a formal business letter. The use of the idiom 'an arm and a leg' is inappropriate in this context, as it usually refers to cost rather than effort. Additionally, phrases like 'give extra efforts' and 'on onus of the company' are non-standard and sound unnatural. To reach a higher band, focus on using more professional collocations and avoiding informal idioms when writing to a superior.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'taking transfer to' (should be 'a transfer to'), 'in the Canada' (remove 'the'), and 'it will take my an arm and a leg' (should be 'it will take a lot of effort'). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors and the lack of complex sentence variety limit your score. Try to incorporate more complex structures, such as conditional sentences or relative clauses, and pay closer attention to article usage and prepositions.

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