Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to request you for reallocate me in our overseas head office for 6 months.

I have been a honest and reliable employee since past 5 years. Our company has made me learn every basic from scratch, it makes me feel blessed that i made the right choice of getting on board., I was able to sharp my skills enough and now i want to learn new leadership and operations skills and for that i strongly believe, moving abroad will assist me in achieving my goals.

I will thoroughly explain my duties to my subordinates and i am pretty sure they can handle it efficiently. I would keep my weekends available for my fellow mates if they would have any concern. I would also arrange a zoom meeting every Friday at 9 am to discuss the group tasks.

I want to request you to agree on this appeal. Although, getting experience will eventually reflect in my work here. I will make sure my involvement in this company will boost our cognitive sales.

I look forward to hearing back from you.

Yours Sincerely,

Jason

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, outlining how your work will be managed, and asking for the manager's assistance. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how your work will be covered is a bit vague, and the request for help is not explicitly stated as a call to action. To improve, ensure that each bullet point is expanded with more specific detail to fully satisfy the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your request. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Although' and 'I would also', to link ideas. However, the transition between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with comma splices (e.g., 'getting on board., I was able to...'). Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words and ensuring better sentence-level punctuation would enhance the flow and coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to communicate your request, but there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors. For example, 'reallocate me' is not the standard term for a temporary transfer; 'transfer' or 'secondment' would be more precise. Similarly, 'cognitive sales' is an unusual collocation that does not fit the context. While your meaning is generally clear, you should focus on using more natural, professional collocations to elevate your writing to a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Common issues include incorrect preposition usage ('since past 5 years' should be 'for the past 5 years'), verb form errors ('made me learn every basic' should be 'taught me the basics'), and inconsistent capitalization of 'I'. While these errors do not impede overall communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct tense usage will help improve your accuracy.

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