Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Respected manager,

Subject: working head office in another company

Respected sir I am writing a letter for imformaing I want to work in head office in Canada companies.I send my resume so many companies in Canada. One of the companies give me the job in a head office for next six months .i want to join that company because that is the very good opportunity for me.

I also do work in your company because i am not going to Canada ,my work is online.I try. MY best ,so I request you to helping me arranging the things .i trust you are arran everything like time,and things I need.

I hope you understand susguation .i never want to lost that opportunity.l am looking forward your response.

Thank you

Harman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points, but the development is insufficient. The explanation for wanting to work in Canada is vague, and the plan for how work will be handled remotely is not clearly articulated. Furthermore, the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum, which negatively impacts the depth of the response. The tone is also inconsistent; while it is a formal request, the phrasing 'Respected manager' and the lack of professional structure suggest a misunderstanding of the required register for a business letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is divided into short paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, making the text feel disjointed. For example, the transition between the request for help and the mention of the manager's role is abrupt. The use of referencing is also unclear, particularly when referring to 'the things' and 'everything', which makes the reader work too hard to understand the specific request. Better use of linking words such as 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'in addition' would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. Basic errors in word choice, such as 'imformaing' (informing) and 'susguation' (situation), occur frequently. The student relies on simple, everyday language and struggles to use professional terminology appropriate for a business context. There is no attempt to use less common lexical items or collocations. To improve, the student needs to focus on spelling accuracy and expanding their range of business-related vocabulary to express their intentions more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('One of the companies give me'), article usage ('in head office'), and sentence structure. The punctuation is also inconsistent, with irregular spacing and missing capitalization. The response relies almost entirely on simple sentences, with very few attempts at complex structures. The errors are frequent enough to occasionally impede the reader's understanding, particularly in the second paragraph where the request for help is phrased awkwardly.

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