Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr Smith,

I am writing this letter to express my desier to be tranfered to the head office of the company in London.

I have been working in the company for over five years now, and I would like to be tranfered to the head office of the establishment for six months.

Additionaly, the head office offers some training courses in AI technology, that could be very beneficil to ower company here in Toronto.

Moreover, conserning my work in the company, it will be arranged by my colleage in the office, I have informed her with all the necessary duties and information details, that should be done while I am a way fo six months.

Therefore, I would appreciate it if you could assiste me throughout my tranfering process, and write a recommendation letter to the CEO of the company in London.

Thank you for your attention regarding my matter, I look forward to hearing your prompt response,

Yours sincerely,

Amanda Grace

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, outlining how your work will be covered, and asking for assistance. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention AI training, you could have elaborated more on how this specific skill set would benefit the company upon your return. Similarly, the explanation of how your work will be managed is brief. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with more specific details to demonstrate a more professional and thoughtful approach.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure, with each paragraph addressing a specific part of the task. You have used some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Moreover', and 'Therefore' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally slightly mechanical. The paragraphing is clear, which helps the reader follow your request easily. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the transition between your current role and the proposed transfer is smoother. Overall, the organization is clear and serves the purpose of the letter well.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, such as 'express my desire', 'recommendation letter', and 'prompt response'. However, there are several spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'desier', 'tranfered', 'beneficil', 'ower', 'conserning', 'colleage', and 'assiste'. These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable, although they do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning. To improve, focus on proofreading your work to catch these common spelling mistakes. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise professional collocations would also help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'I am writing this letter to express...' and 'I would appreciate it if you could assist me...'. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'informed her with all the necessary duties' (should be 'informed her of') and 'a way fo six months' (should be 'away for'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, though some comma splices occur. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and preposition usage. Increasing the variety of complex sentence structures while ensuring accuracy will help you achieve a higher band.

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