Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

I am writing this letter to request to allow me to work in the head office of our company for some times.

To begin with, I am working in your company for two years, I gained valuable experience during working. However, I really want to develop new skills while working in our head office, where I can interact with people from different countries which would allow me to understand distinct techniques and methods to solve a problem.

Talking about the responsibility from this branch, I already had a talk with my colleagues, they are very supportive and ready to cover my work in my non-existence. Also, I will follow up all work.

I am requesting you to support me to go with this decision, so that I am able to perform well in my work which will help me to improve our company's performance.

I hope you will understand my viewpoint and give support.

Regards,

Lovely

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, describing the work handover process, and asking for assistance. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention wanting to develop new skills, you could have been more specific about which skills or which head office projects interest you. Similarly, the explanation of how your work will be covered is quite brief. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is expanded with more detail and professional justification to fully satisfy the requirements of a formal business letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure, with a clear opening, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'However', and 'Also' to link your ideas. While the progression is generally clear, the transitions between sentences can feel a bit mechanical. The paragraphing is appropriate for a letter format. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your referencing (e.g., 'this decision') clearly points back to the previously mentioned ideas to create a smoother flow between paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your message clearly. You use some relevant business-related terms like 'valuable experience', 'responsibilities', and 'performance'. However, there are some awkward phrasings, such as 'in my non-existence' (which is incorrect; 'in my absence' would be better) and 'for some times' (which should be 'for some time'). To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding literal translations that sound unnatural in a professional context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'I am working in your company for two years' (should be present perfect continuous: 'I have been working'), and 'I already had a talk' (should be 'I have already spoken'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to impact the overall accuracy. Increasing your control over verb tenses and sentence construction will help you achieve a higher score.

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