Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
- say how your work could be done while you are away
- ask for his/her help in arranging it
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear sir,
I hope you are good in health and spirit. I am writing this letter to discuss something related to work with you. My name is Manpreet Singh and I am head chef of Bmc food company.
As you know, In daily routine, numerous of people come to the branch for food. Most of the time they ask for different food items which are not available in our branch. therefore, I would like to go native country where the food is produced and prepared so i can learn about the skills which will be helpful for this branch.
Further more, I can make stock orders online while I am in the another country. Also, there is a another guy his name is Rahul he is good chef and responsible person. I have taught him everything from preparation to service.
Therefore, If you can arrange my travel tickets and stay in another country that would be really helpful.
Kind regards,
Manpreet Singh
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly state the reason for wanting to work at the head office, explain how your duties will be covered by Rahul, and request assistance with travel and accommodation. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of why you want to go to the 'native country' is vague, and the description of how your work will be managed could be more professional. To improve, ensure your tone is consistently formal and provide more specific details regarding the professional benefits of this exchange to the company.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your request. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Further more', 'Also', and 'Therefore'. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by mechanical phrasing and some awkward transitions. The use of 'Further more' is slightly informal for a business letter, and the paragraphing could be more refined to separate the request from the logistical details. Increasing the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used naturally would help improve the overall cohesion of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and professional tone expected in a formal business request. Phrases like 'discuss something related to work' and 'another guy' are too informal. You rely on simple, repetitive vocabulary such as 'food' and 'branch'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more sophisticated, topic-specific terminology related to professional development, international business, and delegation. Avoid colloquialisms and aim for a more polished, professional register throughout the letter.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'numerous of people' (should be 'numerous people' or 'a large number of people'), 'go native country' (missing 'to the'), and 'there is a another guy'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure will significantly improve your accuracy.
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