Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Mr. Sharma,

I am writing this letter regarding a continuous noise from newly constructed campus restaurant. Although the restaurant particularly a great place for food lovers, it is challenging for students to concentrate in their studies, and they have to struggle to get a good hours of sleep at night.

The cause of this problem is intense noise of live music and their operations, while preparing dishes till late night. My colleagues and I have noticed that high level of noise is casting an destructive effect on our ability to concentrate on study.

It would be highly appreciated if you address this matter very carefully. I propose that he live music should be restricted till 10.00PM. As far as cooking is concerned, they could do it in the evening time.

I hope you would review the the policies about this concern.

Your faithfully,

Karanveer Sandhu.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0

The response is completely off-topic. The task required a letter to a manager requesting a six-month transfer to a head office, including explanations of the work handover. Instead, the student wrote a complaint letter to a Mr. Sharma regarding noise from a restaurant. Because the response fails to address any of the bullet points or the core prompt, it cannot be assessed as a successful completion of the task. Additionally, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which further impacts the score. To improve, you must carefully read the prompt and ensure your content aligns with the specific scenario provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is structured with an introduction, body, and conclusion, which provides a basic framework. However, the logical progression is hindered by the fact that the content is irrelevant to the prompt. Paragraphing is present, but the transition between the complaint about the restaurant and the proposed solution is somewhat abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Although' and 'As far as', but they are not sufficient to overcome the fundamental issue of the content being entirely misaligned with the task instructions.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for basic communication, but it is not suited to the professional context required by the prompt. There are some awkward collocations, such as 'casting an destructive effect' (should be 'having a destructive effect') and 'good hours of sleep'. The range is limited, and there are minor errors in word choice that detract from the overall quality. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise academic or professional vocabulary and ensuring correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'from newly constructed campus restaurant' (missing an article), 'the restaurant particularly a great place' (missing a verb), and 'review the the policies' (repetition). While the meaning is generally clear, these errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on article usage, subject-verb agreement, and proofreading to eliminate simple slips like repeated words.

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