Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope this letter finds you. I am writing this letter to let you know that I have developed interest in working at the Head Office.

I want to work there for six months closely monitoring the sales pipeline how my seniors work under pressure how they encounter difficult clients and how they pitch the product to other businesses, This will help me gain more experience add more to my knowledge and achieve my targets more proficiently for our branch.

I will make sure that my absence will not effect out branch's performance I will be connected through mails and other social platforms and will always be present to solve any queries regarding the work.

Sir, I would need some help for the arrangements to travel to other country as you are my manager I kindly request you to help and guide me through the process I will be very grateful for that.

Kind Regards,

Malik

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly explain your motivation for the six-month placement, propose a method for managing your current workload, and request assistance from your manager. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although it could be slightly more professional. The ideas are relevant, but they could be developed further; for instance, providing more specific details on how you would hand over your current responsibilities would strengthen the proposal. Overall, the task is fulfilled effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the purpose of the letter to the request for help. However, the paragraphing is insufficient; the entire body of the letter is essentially one long block of text, which makes it harder to read. While you use some cohesive devices like 'This will help me' and 'I will make sure', the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical. Using more varied transition words and breaking the text into distinct paragraphs for each bullet point would significantly improve the clarity and structure of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'sales pipeline', 'proficiently', and 'grateful'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'developed interest' should be 'developed an interest', and 'effect out branch's performance' contains a spelling error ('effect' instead of 'affect') and a typo ('out' instead of 'our'). While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the score. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise professional terminology and ensure correct word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in punctuation and grammar. For example, there is a run-on sentence in the second paragraph: '...how they pitch the product to other businesses, This will help me...'. You also omit articles in several places, such as 'travel to other country' (should be 'another country'). Punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with commas and full stops. While the meaning remains clear, the frequency of these minor errors prevents a higher score. Focus on sentence boundaries and article usage to improve accuracy.

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