Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
- say how your work could be done while you are away
- ask for his/her help in arranging it
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear sir or Madam,
Subject: Application for the transfer to head branch.
I am writing to request you for transfer me to company's head branch for six months. I want to work in head office due to its work environment which is very motivational and give a motivation to learn from our mistakes and help to work on new skills. Further, I am working on the project where my one of the tem member is from head office. Once I will be there we can work together and save the time that we consume while waitng reply from each others.
In addition, I need your help for moving to main branch. I really want to boost up my skills, which will also help our office once I will be back after working in head branch. So, I want you to do some arrangement for to work there.
I am looking forward to your positive response.
Thank you so much.
Yours faithfully,
Sukhbir.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The candidate has successfully addressed all three parts of the prompt. First, the writer explains the reason for wanting to work in the head office, mentioning a motivational environment and working with a team member. Second, the response touches upon how work could be done by collaborating directly to save time. Third, the letter explicitly asks for the manager's help in arranging the transfer. Although the ideas are somewhat repetitive and lack deeper development, all bullet points are covered adequately. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. This performance aligns well with the requirements for a Band 6.0 in Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter maintains a coherent overall arrangement with a clear purpose established early on. Paragraphing is used to separate the introduction, the main body points, and the concluding sign-off. However, cohesive devices are at times mechanical or faulty, such as the abrupt transitions between sentences (e.g., 'Further, I am working on the project' and 'In addition, I need your help'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, and punctuation errors near the beginning ('Dear sir or Madam') disrupt the flow slightly. Progression is visible, but the logical links between ideas need smoother integration to reach a higher band. Overall, this demonstrates features of a Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting words like 'motivational', 'collaborate', and 'arrangement', though with some noticeable inaccuracies and awkward collocations, such as 'request you for transfer me' and 'save the time that we consume while waitng reply from each others'. Spelling slips ('waitng') and grammatical word-choice issues occur, but communication is not impeded. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning, matching the criteria for a Band 5.5 or 6.0. Given the successful communication despite the lexical limitations, a Band 6.0 is appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'Once I will be there we can work together and save the time that we consume...' However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and prepositions, including 'request you for transfer me', 'One of the tem member', and 'arrangement for to work there'. Some future time clauses incorrectly use the future tense ('Once I will be there'). While these errors do not impede overall communication, they occur regularly enough to prevent the response from achieving a Band 6.5. Therefore, a Band 6.0 accurately reflects the balance of correct and flawed structures.
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