Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this email to you that I want to work in head office in another nation for six months . It is useful for my career development . If I will spend six months in other country then I will get international experience as well as I will learn some straegy which I will share with my collegeaues. Apart from this , I will do my work online and If it is not possible to submit by online then i will cover it after 6 months . I need your help with reference with another company . If you will help me I will really aprreciate it . Thank you for your time .

Yours Sincerely,

Raman.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers all three bullet points required in the task instructions: you explain why you want to work in the head office ('useful for my career development', 'get international experience'), you explain how work will be handled ('do my work online and If it is not possible to submit by online then i will cover it after 6 months'), and you ask for help ('I need your help with reference with another company'). However, the response is significantly under-length at 121 words, failing the 150-word minimum requirement. Furthermore, the mention of 'another company' in the request for help misinterprets the prompt, which asks to transfer to the company's own head office. These limitations restrict the score to Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks appropriate paragraphing, written almost as a single dense block of text, which severely impacts the visual layout and structural flow of a formal correspondence. While basic cohesive devices such as 'If', 'Apart from this', and 'Then' are used to link ideas, their application is repetitive and mechanical. The organisation shows some basic progression from the opening statement to the reasons, work arrangements, and closing request, but the lack of distinct paragraphs and awkward referencing keeps this criterion at a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, such as 'work', 'months', and 'help'. There are notable word choice errors and misspellings, including 'straegy' instead of strategy, 'collegeaues' instead of colleagues, and 'aprreciate' instead of appreciate. The range of vocabulary is barely adequate to communicate the basic message, utilizing simple terms without demonstrating the ability to use less common lexical items accurately or flexibly. This aligns closely with the Band 5 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on basic, repetitive conditional clauses such as 'If I will spend...' and 'If you will help me...'. These represent frequent grammatical errors, as the present simple rather than the future tense should follow 'if' in first conditional sentences. There are also punctuation and capitalization issues, such as spaces before commas ('apart from this ,') and lower-case 'i'. Because errors occur frequently in basic sentence patterns and complex structures are largely absent or faulty, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.

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