Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Manager,

I am writing to ask if I could spend sim months working at our company head office in another country. I believe this would be a great opportunity for my proffession.

I would like to work at the head office because I want to gain more international experience and learn how to company opperate on the large scale . I believe this experience would help me to take more responsibility in future.

While I am away my most of the current work must we done by online. I could attend the meetings by video calls and communicate the team meambers by email and messaging application. For my physical present I could train a collique for handle them during my absent.

I would be very thankfull if you could help me to arriange this opportinitity. Please let me know if there are formal processior or any document processior to complete

Thank you for concedering my requiest .I look forward to hearing from you yours sincerly,

Gurvinder

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response successfully covers all three bullet points required by the task prompt. You clearly explain your motivation for wanting to work at the head office ('to gain more international experience and learn how to company opperate on the large scale'), outline how your work will be managed during your absence ('While I am away my most of the current work must we done by online'), and ask for assistance in making arrangements ('I would be very thankfull if you could help me to arriange this opportinitity'). The tone is appropriately formal for a letter to a manager. Although some ideas are slightly basic and limited in development, all requirements of the prompt are addressed, fulfilling the criteria for a Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into appropriate paragraphs corresponding to the introduction, body points, and conclusion. Ideas generally progress in a logical sequence, following the prompt's structure. However, cohesive devices are somewhat basic or mechanically applied (e.g., repeating 'I believe' and 'While I am away'). Referencing and paragraph transitions occasionally feel abrupt due to sentence-level structural issues. Overall, the arrangement is coherent enough to earn a Band 6.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your message clearly, but it contains several spelling and word-form errors. Examples include 'sim' instead of 'six', 'proffession' instead of 'profession', 'opperate' instead of 'operate', 'present' instead of 'presence', 'collique' instead of 'colleague', 'thankfull' instead of 'thankful', 'arriange' instead of 'arrange', 'processior' instead of 'process', and 'concedering' instead of 'considering'. These numerous spelling errors and occasional awkward collocations prevent the lexical score from reaching a higher band, placing it firmly at a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'I would like to work at the head office because I want to gain more international experience...' However, there are frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'must we done by online', 'communicate the team meambers', and 'for my absent'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding missing full stops and improper spacing before commas. While these errors do not completely impede overall communication, their frequency and interference mean the grammar sits at a Band 5.0 level.

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