Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir,

This letter find you in good health and high spirits.

I am writing this letter to company manager.

I want to work in the company"s head office

for six month.I hard work for your company,

let you know up the all company points. i am

good expreince and i have two year expreince.

I will work your could be done and let i am go

six month head office post.It is all work handle

my colleague. when i will work in your head office

Raman, he has good expreince of my work so he

will handle my all work if any urgent work required

complete it online.

He his helping for company manager,if will you urgent

arranging it.When i will work start quickly head office

post. I will request your company manger, If you will

urgent arranging it.

yours Faithfully,

Balraj Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover all three bullet points required by the prompt. You mentioned wanting to work at the head office for six months, suggested that your colleague Raman could handle your work and complete urgent tasks online, and requested help arranging it. However, the ideas are underdeveloped and heavily obscured by unclear phrasing and repetition, such as 'I will work your could be done and let i am go six month head office post'. Furthermore, the response falls short of the 150-word minimum requirement, containing only 144 words. This negative impact on the length requirement combined with limited development places the task achievement score at Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The logical progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by broken syntax and inadequate linking devices. The letter is broken into short, disjointed paragraphs and standalone sentences that make it difficult to follow the flow of information. For example, sentences like 'He his helping for company manager,if will you urgent arranging it' lack clear referencing and cohesive ties. Paragraphing is attempted but used inappropriately due to fragmented thoughts and poor structuring. Overall, the organizational structure is strained, fitting the Band 4.0 descriptors closely.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student repeats phrases such as 'company manager', 'six month', and 'good expreince' multiple times throughout the short text. There are also numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'expreince' instead of experience and 'manger' instead of manager. These lexical limitations and errors frequently strain the reader and obscure the intended meaning, which corresponds to a Band 4.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the letter, with a very limited range of structures. Almost every sentence contains serious grammatical errors, incorrect word forms, or missing verbs, such as 'This letter find you in good health', 'I hard work for your company', and 'let i am go'. Punctuation is also faulty, with missing spaces after periods and commas. Because errors are extremely frequent and often distort the meaning of the sentences, the performance aligns with Band 4.0.

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