Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir,

I am writing to request that i want to work in your head office which is located in another country for six months. Because i believe that with this i can improve my communication skills by commucating with international people, I can also get new experience, understand how the company works globally,improve your career opportunities and learn new skils. These all things would be beneficial for our bussiness here like bring new knowledge back to your current office, improve communication with international colleagues, share new ideas and working methods. Meanwhile, i could be done my work here by video call and completing work online and doing my assignments. I think that you will be help me to do all things. I am waiting for your response.

Your Faithfully,

Arshpreet Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all three bullet points from the prompt: explaining the desire to work in the head office, addressing how work would be managed during the absence, and asking for assistance. However, the ideas are presented in a very compressed manner without sufficient extension or detail, particularly regarding the third bullet point, which is merely touched upon with 'I think that you will be help me to do all things.' Furthermore, the response falls short of the 150-word minimum requirement, containing only 132 words. This under-length impacts the overall development of the task, leading to a Band 5.5 score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks appropriate paragraphing, grouping the entire body into a single block of text along with the opening and closing. This creates a dense appearance and impacts the logical progression of ideas. While the transition from explaining the reasons to discussing work arrangements is somewhat understandable, the lack of paragraph breaks and limited use of cohesive devices make the flow mechanical. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as shifting pronouns between 'your company' and 'our business'. Therefore, the coherence and cohesion correspond to Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally repetitive and relies on basic terms such as 'good', 'work', and 'skills'. There are also spelling and word-form errors, such as 'commucating' instead of communicating, 'bussiness' instead of business, and the incorrect pronoun usage 'improve your career opportunities' when the writer means their own career. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the message, these frequent slips and lack of precision restrict the score to Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences or run-on compound sentences linked by coordinating conjunctions. There are noticeable grammatical errors, such as 'i want to work' with a lowercase 'i', and the awkward construction 'i could be done my work here by video call'. Punctuation is also weak, with missing commas after introductory elements and incorrect capitalization throughout. Because attempts at more complex structures are inaccurate and errors occur frequently, a band score of 5.0 is appropriate.

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