Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
- say how your work could be done while you are away
- ask for his/her help in arranging it
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Ahmad Sir, I hope you are all fine. As Iam Working in you International Company from about 4 years. Iam a hardworking person and I have gained much experience in your Company. Few days before you were talking about the job opportunities in the head office. Basically I thought about that job. I think that job will be mindblowing for my career. I can seek much knowledge and also give you Improvements as well. I would use to engage things for the betterment of the company.
I think it would be the best oppurtunity for me to improve my experience by getting knowledge from the seniors working in the head office. They will surely encourage me to do betterment and will teach me.
Iam requesting you to help me in arranging the job in the Head Office of the company that would be better for all of us. I shall be very thankful of you.
Regards
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The letter partially addresses all bullet points in the prompt, though the development is somewhat limited and informal. You attempted to explain why you want to work at the head office ('I think that job will be mindblowing for my career'), and you expressed a desire to arrange it through your manager. However, the second bullet point regarding how your work could be done while you are away is notably weak and vague, as you mention 'I can seek much knowledge and also give you Improvements as well' without explaining coverage of your current responsibilities. The tone is overly informal and sometimes unclear. Therefore, this fulfills the requirements for a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks appropriate paragraphing and logical progression. The response is presented as two large blocks of text rather than distinct paragraphs addressing each requirement of the prompt. Cohesive devices are minimal and basic, with repetitive use of transition-like openings such as 'I think' and 'I can'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, for instance, when transitioning between your career goals and how work will be handled. While the general message can be understood, the structural organisation falls short of Band 6 standards, making a Band 5.0 evaluation appropriate.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, utilizing everyday terms like 'hardworking person', 'much knowledge', and 'best oppurtunity' (which contains a spelling error). You attempt some less common phrases such as 'mindblowing' or 'betterment', but these are either overly informal or slightly unnatural in a professional business context. Collocations are occasionally awkward, such as 'use to engage things'. Vocabulary errors and limited lexical range mean this sits comfortably within the Band 5.0 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences. There are frequent errors in capitalization, punctuation, and phrasing, such as 'Dear Ahmad Sir, I hope you are all fine', 'As Iam Working in you International Company from about 4 years', and 'Iam requesting you'. Tense usage and prepositions are often inaccurate ('from about 4 years' instead of 'for about 4 years'). These persistent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a Band 5.0 performance for grammar.
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