Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear sir,

I work in your company as a assistant, now i want to become a regular part of your company as a physically please give me a chance or invite me in your country as a work perment. I am very hardworking, punctual, and collaborative with my work. I work for you for a long time but now i want to become a part of your work in your country. please invite me a chance to join you just for six months for undersranding your tasks as physically after that I will be manage my work.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word length requirement, containing only 97 words instead of the required 150 words. Regarding the content, the letter attempts to cover the bullet points by stating a desire to work in the head office for six months to understand tasks physically, but the ideas are severely underdeveloped and lack clarity. The explanation of how work will be done while away is extremely vague, with the phrase 'after that I will be manage my work' failing to address delegation or coverage adequately. Furthermore, the request for help in arranging the transfer is missing entirely, as the writer only makes demands ('please give me a chance') rather than asking for managerial assistance. Because of the under-length penalty and incomplete task coverage, a low band is warranted.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The letter lacks proper paragraphing, presented instead as a single, dense block of text. Cohesion is very weak and mechanical; sentences are strung together with basic conjunctions or punctuation comma-splices, such as in 'now i want to become a regular part... please give me a chance'. There is an absence of clear cohesive devices to guide the reader logically through the bullet points. While the overall purpose of the letter is vaguely discernible, the lack of paragraph division and poor sentence sequencing mean that information and ideas are not arranged coherently enough to reach a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted. Words like 'work', 'company', and 'want' are repeated constantly throughout the short text. There are also frequent word choice errors and unnatural collocations, such as 'as a physically', 'work perment' (permanent), and 'undersranding your tasks as physically'. The lexical range is barely adequate for the task, and the frequent errors in word formation and collocation cause strain for the reader, placing the response firmly in the lower band range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying almost entirely on simple and frequently run-on sentences connected by commas. There are numerous basic grammatical errors, including lowercase capitalization at the start of sentences ('now i want'), missing articles ('as a assistant'), incorrect preposition usage ('in your country as a work perment'), and tense/verb form errors ('I will be manage my work'). The frequency of these structural errors and the lack of complex sentence forms mean that meaning is occasionally obscured and the criteria for higher bands are not met.

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