Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Respected manager,

Hope so you are doing well, i am writing this letter to express my perspective about to work in a head office that is situated in another country.I am feeling proud to work in this international firm that gives me a valuable skills and expanding my experince and skills however i want to get an International expousre while working in a head office ,could you please accept my request to move in a another country . I understand you going to worry about the work but i am going to take its responsibily that i will look it side by side by online connecting to the comany. could you please accept my request so that i can get a international experince in the head office while working in a new enviornment becouse it will build some new skills and language skills too.

sincerily

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response covers all three bullet points required in the prompt: you explained why you want to work in the head office, described how your work could be managed while away through online connection, and asked for help in arranging the transfer. However, your ideas are somewhat limited and repetitive, particularly regarding the reasons for going. Furthermore, the length requirement has not been met, as the response contains only 145 words against the required 150-word minimum. This results in a penalty for under-length, placing the response at a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter lacks proper paragraphing and is presented as a single, dense block of text. Cohesive devices are minimal, relying heavily on repeating words like 'because' and 'however', and run-on sentences are common due to comma splices (for instance, writing 'another country.I am feeling proud...' and 'request to move in a another country .I understand...'). There is no clear overall progression of ideas, as the sentences jump between reasons, work arrangements, and requests without clear logical separation. This level of organisation aligns with Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary range is limited and repetitive, with words like 'work', 'skills', 'request', and 'experience' appearing multiple times. There are several noticeable lexical errors, such as 'expousre' instead of 'exposure', 'enviornment' instead of 'environment', and inappropriate collocations like 'move in a another country' instead of 'transfer to another country'. These errors and the limited range mean the vocabulary is only minimally adequate for the task, which corresponds to a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The text relies mostly on simple and flawed complex sentence structures, lacking a strong variety of grammatical forms. There are frequent errors in punctuation and grammar, including missing capitalisation after full stops, incorrect verb forms ('Hope so you are doing well', 'you going to worry'), and punctuation faults. Many sentences are run-on clauses linked improperly by commas. While meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of errors causes some difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.

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