Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

dear /[jakson]

i am writing to formally request the opportunity to spend six months working at our company's head office in seoul

this transition would allow me to gain a deeper understanding of our global operation and collaborate more closely with the team driving our central strategies .I believe this experience would be highly beneficial for my professional development and Allow me to contribute more effectively upon my return.

To insure a smooth workflow during my absence,i have already identified potential team members who can assume my key responsibilities.I would create a detailed transition plan to prevent any disruption.

I would appreciate your guidance and support in arranging this international rotation.Thank you for considering my request

sincerely,

(shiva pathak)

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all three parts of the prompt: it explains the motivation for wanting to work in the Seoul head office, outlines how work coverage will be managed, and asks the manager for arrangement assistance. However, because the task length requirement was not met—coming in at 119 words instead of the minimum 150 words—certain bullet points remain somewhat concise and under-developed. For instance, the explanation of how responsibilities will be handled during the absence mentions a transition plan and colleagues, but lacks further elaboration that would fully extend the ideas. To reach the next level, the writer needs to ensure all prompt requirements are thoroughly expanded with supporting details while meeting the word count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter maintains a coherent overall arrangement with a clear, logical progression from stating the request to explaining the rationale, managing workflow, and concluding with a polite call to action. Paragraphing is utilised to separate distinct points, such as moving from the personal development goals to the logistical transition plan. While basic referencing and progression are handled well, mechanical issues such as missing capitalisation at the start of sentences and the awkward block formatting slightly detract from seamless cohesion. To achieve a higher band, the student should employ a wider and more natural variety of cohesive devices while ensuring consistent formatting and paragraphing standards throughout the correspondence.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

An adequate vocabulary range is employed to fulfill the task requirements, featuring functional business expressions such as 'formally request', 'global operation', 'professional development', and 'transition plan'. The writer attempts less common lexical items, though there is some minor inaccuracy in word choice, such as 'insure' instead of 'ensure'. Spelling and word choice errors do not impede communication overall, and the tone remains appropriately professional despite minor slips. To move beyond this band, the student should incorporate a wider selection of sophisticated phrasing and less common collocations with greater precision, while paying closer attention to exact spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and infinitive structures effectively, as seen in 'which can assume my key responsibilities'. There are some noticeable errors in grammar and punctuation, particularly a lack of capitalisation at the beginnings of sentences (e.g., 'i am writing', 'To insure', 'i have already') and missing terminal punctuation in some lines. However, these errors are limited and rarely impede overall communication. To reach a higher band, the writer must exercise greater accuracy with punctuation, sentence boundaries, and capitalisation, while demonstrating a more consistent control over complex grammatical structures.

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