Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear, Manager

I hope you are doing great.

I am writing a request for doing six months working in our head office. However, I would like to inhance my communication ,team work and problem solving skills by getting tranfer to our main branch. This is beacuse when I will do work in new environment or with new individuals, when teach me something new or tell me my negative points that fruitfull for my bright future.

Moreover,I will be covered all my work from there on time and without any excuss or delay.

Despite, I will be two task to do one, head office or any from our branch. Therefore, I already schuadued all my timetable so, you will no need to take any type of worries.

If could you please do some arrangement for my tranfer, I really appricate that.

I am looking forward toward your promt response.

Your faithfully.

parminder singh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the three bullet points outlined in the prompt, but the treatment of these ideas remains limited and under-developed. You successfully state your intention to work at the head office for six months to enhance your skills and mention your plan to cover your responsibilities while away, while also requesting assistance. However, the explanation lacks depth, and your position is sometimes obscured by confusing phrasing, such as mentioning two tasks at once. To move to a higher band, you would need to extend your ideas with more specific details, fully developing how your duties will be managed and clearly explaining the professional benefits of the transfer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation to your letter, with an appropriate opening greeting and paragraph breaks separating your main points. However, the progression of ideas is not always clear, and the overall logical arrangement is hindered by awkward transitions. Cohesive devices are sometimes inaccurate or mechanical, such as the misuse of transition words like 'Despite' and 'Therefore' in sentences like 'Despite, I will be two task to do one...' Referencing between sentences can be unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your exact meaning. To improve, you should focus on using cohesive devices more naturally and ensuring that each paragraph flows logically into the next with clear connecting ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary range is limited but minimally adequate for fulfilling the basic requirements of the letter. You attempt to use some less common words, but this leads to noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling, such as 'inhance', 'tranfer', 'beacuse', 'excuss', 'schuadued', and 'promt'. These lexical errors and incorrect collocations cause some difficulty for the reader and impede clear communication at times. To achieve a higher score, you should expand your range of workplace terminology and pay closer attention to accurate spelling and word formation, ensuring that words like 'transfer' and 'enhance' are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You display a limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on basic patterns with frequent attempts at complex sentences that are often faulty. There are numerous grammatical errors throughout the letter, including issues with verb forms and tenses, subject-verb agreement, prepositions, and sentence construction, as seen in expressions like 'I am writing a request for doing six months working' and 'If could you please do some arrangement'. These frequent errors frequently strain the reader and cause difficulty in understanding your exact meaning. To lift your grammar score, you need to demonstrate better control over basic sentence structures, reduce the frequency of errors in verb patterns, and improve punctuation and phrasing.

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