Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Manager,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing this letter to apprise you that I would like to work in your international company's head office for the next six months.

Firstly, I would like to bring to your attention that I have been working for the last 2 years in the same position. Now, I have heard that a position is open, and I think I am suitable for that position. With this, I have gained more knowledge and skills for the head office work.

However, I would like to mention that when I am away from work, my absence does not disrupt you. I told my senior colleague, Mr Aman, to handle my responsibilities while I am away. In addition, I have completed all the projects before my departure.

Finally, I would appreciate it if you could make this arrangement possible. Also, please let me know about the procedure for it.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Kulveer Singh.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.5
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.5
Overall6.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three requested points: you explain your interest in the head office, describe how duties might be covered, and ask your manager to help arrange the move. The reason for going is relevant, especially your experience in the same role and your belief that you are suitable. However, the benefit of working abroad is not fully explained, and “I have gained more knowledge and skills for the head office work” is unclear about what you have gained or how it supports the request. The coverage plan is also somewhat uncertain: you say you “told” a colleague to take over, rather than explaining whether this has been agreed. Develop these details and make the request more specific to strengthen the letter’s purpose.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information is arranged in a clear sequence: your reason for applying, the proposed cover, and your request for assistance each receive a separate paragraph. Linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “In addition,” and “Finally” help the reader follow the progression, and the closing is appropriate. This is a coherent overall structure. Some transitions feel mechanical, however, because several paragraphs begin with formulaic signposts, and “With this” does not clearly connect the preceding experience to your suitability. The reference to “my absence” is also slightly confusing after you have said you want to work at another office; clarify that you mean your current role will be covered. More natural links between ideas and clearer referencing would make the organisation feel more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a formal workplace letter, including “apprise,” “responsibilities,” “departure,” and “consideration.” These choices show an attempt to use less common and appropriately formal language. Some expressions are not natural or precise in context: “apprise you that” is an awkward way to introduce the request, “head office work” is vague, and “make this arrangement possible” does not specify what help you need. “I have heard that a position is open” could also be more direct and professional. Choose familiar collocations that express your meaning precisely, such as explaining that you would like to apply for a temporary placement and asking for guidance on approval and arrangements.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

The letter includes a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, and most sentences communicate their meaning clearly. For example, “I would appreciate it if you could make this arrangement possible” uses a polite conditional structure effectively, while “when I am away from work” introduces a subordinate clause. Some grammatical choices are less controlled. In “I have been working for the last 2 years in the same position,” the time phrase is more naturally placed before “in the same position,” and “With this, I have gained…” has an unclear grammatical connection to the previous sentence. The sentence about your absence also shifts between “I am away” and “I told” without making the timing of the arrangement clear. Review sentence links and tense choices so the relationships between events are explicit.

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