Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are in good spirits.I am Amina Tariq employee working in one of the franchise of the most popular international company in Saudia Arabia.

I have been working in this company for the past few years.Sir you know my overall performance was very well.I want to grow my career , curiosity to learn new skills.

Sir i head about six month training program. I need a transfer to the main head office for period of just six months.The head office is located in the Pakistan.

Sir i will gain new experience, become more confident.I will raise the reputation of this company.This program will boost my resume.Sir i will do dual task , my schedule will be tightly managed the presentation and reports will be emailed on time .The man agenda is to build self esteem career and experience without shortcut.Sir i need your help in my transfer to main head office in Pakistan.

I hope for positive action from your side.

Your sincerely

Amina Tariq

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main purpose by requesting a six-month placement in Pakistan and giving reasons such as gaining experience, learning skills, and developing your career. You also ask your manager for help. However, the explanation of how your work would continue while you are away is not sufficiently clear: “I will do dual task” and the reference to emailing presentations and reports do not explain which duties you would handle remotely or how they would be covered. Some reasons, such as improving the company’s reputation, are asserted rather than explained. To make the request more complete, clarify your proposed work arrangements and develop the benefits of the placement with specific details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter follows a generally understandable order: you introduce yourself, explain the proposed transfer, give reasons, and close with a request. This gives the reader a basic sense of the message. However, the ideas are crowded into one main paragraph, and repeated use of “Sir” interrupts the progression and makes the letter sound mechanical. Connections between points are also sometimes unclear, particularly between the training programme, your proposed duties, and the benefits to the company. Use separate paragraphs for your reasons, work arrangements, and request, and link ideas with clear transitions such as “In addition” or “While I am there.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “head office,” “training program,” “transfer,” “experience,” and “reports.” These terms help communicate the general purpose of the letter. However, the range is limited, and several phrases are unnatural or unclear, such as “do dual task,” “main agenda,” and “positive action from your side.” There are also spelling and word-choice problems, including “Saudia Arabia” and “head about,” which may distract the reader. Aim for precise, natural workplace language and choose expressions that clearly describe your proposal, such as continuing specific duties remotely or requesting assistance with the transfer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The letter relies mainly on short, simple statements, with limited control of more varied sentence structures. Errors occur frequently and sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For example, “I am Amina Tariq employee working in one of the franchise” lacks clear sentence structure and article/plural control, while “I want to grow my career, curiosity to learn new skills” does not form a complete, parallel sentence. Punctuation and spacing also need attention, as in “good spirits.I” and “years.Sir.” Practise building complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check articles, verb forms, and punctuation before submitting.

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