Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Respected Sir/Madam,

It is Respectfully stated that I come to know that a temporary seat for six months is vaccant in the headoffice in Australia. It is a great oppertunity for me to work in the head office under the supervision of seniors and the learning environment in the larger office where most senior members of this company perform their duties.

If you consider me for this role, my current tasks will be transfer to Mr. Adam. He has bo objection on this extra work. Mr .Adam not only perform my work in my absence but also encourage me to apply for this role.

Kindly consider me for this job. my previous working record and ability to complete tasks unddr the required deadline makes me suitable candidate for this role. I can assure you that I will perform my duties with full letter and spirit.

Thank you in anticipation.

Yours Sincerely

Mr Y

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main purpose by explaining that you want to work in the Australian head office to learn from senior colleagues, and you propose that Mr Adam take over your duties. You also ask your manager to consider you and offer reassurance about your performance. However, the reasons for the six-month placement are only briefly stated, and the work-cover plan needs more detail about how tasks would be transferred or managed. The request for help arranging the placement is also indirect: “Kindly consider me for this job” does not clearly ask the manager to help organise the transfer. Develop these points and make the requested action explicit so that all parts of the task are covered more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: it introduces the opportunity, explains who could cover your work, and ends with a request and closing. Paragraphing helps separate these functions, and the reader can generally follow your purpose. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes abrupt. For example, the move from the learning environment to “If you consider me for this role” could be linked more clearly, while the final paragraph combines your record, suitability, assurance, and request without a clear order. Some connections are also mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “role” and “work.” Use clearer transitions and organise each paragraph around one main point to make the letter flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant workplace vocabulary, including “head office,” “supervision,” “current tasks,” and “working record,” so the topic is clear. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors reduce accuracy, such as “vaccant,” “oppertunity,” and “headoffice.” Some expressions are also unnatural or unsuitable for a professional letter: “temporary seat” and “with full letter and spirit” do not convey your meaning idiomatically. The formal opening “Respected Sir/Madam” is also less natural than a direct professional salutation. Aim for precise, conventional workplace phrases and check spelling and collocations carefully; this will make your message clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including the conditional “If you consider me for this role” and the relative clause “where most senior members … perform their duties.” The overall meaning is usually understandable, but errors occur in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries. For example, “my current tasks will be transfer” should use a past participle, and “Mr. Adam not only perform” needs a correctly inflected verb. The sentence beginning “my previous working record…” also needs an article and clearer sentence punctuation after “job.” Capitalisation and spacing around sentence starts and titles are inconsistent. Review these patterns and proofread each sentence for a complete, correctly formed structure.

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