Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Mr. Manager,

I hope this letter find you well, I am writing a request , If i can workr six months one our branch in another country. I had experirnce one of our international company.

I think I'm fit to worked, one of our head office to another country, because i had enough experience on dealing those problems, and I want to have more experince dealing with other people specially to other country, to Improve my skills on that position.

Firstly, you know me already, how to deal with anykinds of problem that comes to our company. You always give me that hardest part problem dealing with the company isue, and dealing also with the client, and i always close the deal. So I'm fir to work fro six months to the job site to other country.

In that case, I hope that you can help me, finr ways to negotiate with our boses regarding this matter and recommend me to them. I'm looking forwars seeing your respond om my request to you.

sincerely yours

Danny Pasian

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You explain that you want to gain international experience and improve your skills, and you refer to your experience handling company problems and clients. However, the response only minimally addresses the full request: it does not explain how your duties could be completed during your absence, such as through remote work, a handover, or a colleague covering them. The reason for the six-month placement is also repeated rather than developed with specific benefits to the company or your role. You ask your manager to help negotiate with senior staff and recommend you, which addresses the request for assistance, but the purpose and arrangements remain unclear. To strengthen the letter, cover each bullet point directly and explain the practical work plan.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a recognisable opening, several body paragraphs, and a closing, and the ideas broadly move from your request to your experience and then to asking for help. However, the progression is weakened by repetition: the wish to work abroad for six months appears in both the opening and the third paragraph, without adding much new information. Connectors such as “Firstly” and “In that case” do not clearly show the relationship between the ideas that follow. Some sentences also run together, making the message harder to follow. Organise the body around the three requested points, with one clear paragraph for your reasons, one for how the work will be managed, and one for the assistance you need.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant workplace vocabulary, including “head office,” “experience,” “client,” “close the deal,” and “recommend me.” This gives the reader a general sense of your professional background. However, the range is basic and several word choices or phrases are inaccurate or unclear, such as “fit to worked,” “job site to other country,” and “hardest part problem.” Spelling errors, including “experirnce,” “isue,” and “looking forwars,” also reduce clarity and control. Aim for precise, natural expressions for a formal workplace request, such as “well suited to the role,” “overseas head office,” and “manage my responsibilities remotely.” Proofreading would help you use your existing ideas more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, for example, “I think I'm fit to worked… because…” and “You always give me that hardest part problem…”. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “I hope this letter find you well” instead of “finds,” “If i can workr six months” as an incomplete clause, and “I’m fit to work” followed by the incorrect form “worked.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, particularly in the opening, where several ideas are joined with commas. Use complete sentences, check subject–verb agreement and verb forms, and separate the request, reasons, and supporting details with clear punctuation.

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