Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to you because i want to let you know that i have a wish to work in your head office. And you are thinking about that suddenly what happened to me. I know everything going goods but i would like to expand my mind. When i will work in main head office i learnt more and more things which will help me in my daily task that i do in this company.

And i will assure you that when i gone to headoffice my work is done by one of my coolick. I already have a converstaion with him and he is agreed to cover my job as well. So i am very grateful to you if You allow me to go there and explore new things to open my mind. And for this please arrange my trip to headoffice.

your's employ,

XYZ

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main purpose by explaining that you want to learn more at the head office and by proposing that a colleague cover your duties. You also ask your manager to arrange the trip. However, the reason for spending six months there is only briefly explained, and the letter does not clearly state the duration. The work-cover plan is also under-developed: you say a colleague has agreed, but give no detail about how tasks would be handed over or monitored. The request for help is vague, since “please arrange my trip” does not specify what support or arrangements you need. Develop each point more fully and make the six-month period explicit to address the task more completely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The ideas appear in a broadly sensible order: your reason for writing and motivation come first, followed by the proposed cover and your request. Basic links such as “And” and “So” help connect some points, but the progression is not consistently clear. For example, “And you are thinking about that suddenly what happened to me” interrupts the explanation and makes the relationship between ideas difficult to follow. The letter is presented as one block, so separating the purpose, work-cover plan, and request into paragraphs would make it easier to read. Use clearer transitions and avoid beginning several sentences with “And” to create a more controlled flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant expressions, including “head office,” “cover my job,” and “explore new things,” so the reader can identify your main intentions. However, the vocabulary is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the message difficult to understand. For instance, “expand my mind” and “open my mind” repeat a similar idea, while “everything going goods” and “coolick” are unclear or misspelled. “Daily task” is also imprecise in this context. Build a wider range of workplace vocabulary and check spelling and natural word combinations; this will help you explain your professional goals and proposed handover more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, such as “When i will work in main head office i learnt more and more things,” but the longer structures are often faulty. Verb forms and tense are inconsistent: “When i will work” and “i learnt” do not form a correct future-time clause, and “when i gone” should use a suitable past participle or future construction. There are also errors with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “in your head office” and “he is agreed.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including lowercase “i” and the run-on opening. Practise accurate basic clauses first, then combine them using controlled subordinate clauses.

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