Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Mr.Sharma,

I am writing this letter to intend you , I am willing to work in head office and there is some reasons behind it. The first one is , this a great opportunity for me to move career ladder because staff is highly qualified, if i get a chance to work with them then i can learn the skills of AI.Artificial intelligence is a key feature of the modern world.

I will be in touch with my other teammates or team leader, I will complete my project and do my work from home . which will help me to balance between two different work places. my co- workers are very cooperative.Also i do night shift here so it would be convinent . i will choose day time shift there.

So , At last here i need your help you can conatct with the CEO of the company and recommmended my name to them. you can also arrange either virtual meeting or interview by which i can show my talent .

I look forword to hearing from you.

your sincerely

Jaspreet Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you explain your interest in learning AI skills at the head office, describe staying in contact with your team and completing work remotely, and ask your manager to contact the CEO and recommend you. The purpose is clear and the ideas are relevant. However, some points are less fully developed than others. For example, the career benefit is explained, but the practical plan for managing projects across locations is vague, and the request for help could specify what arrangements or approval you need from your manager. Clarifying how responsibilities and communication would be handled during the six months would make the proposal more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: the opening explains your motivation, the next paragraph describes how you would work remotely, and the final paragraph makes a request. This helps the reader follow the main purpose. Some linking is mechanical or unclear, however. Phrases such as “The first one” and “So, At last” do not create smooth transitions, while “which will help me to balance between two different work places” is not clearly connected to the preceding sentence. Use clearer paragraph links and make each paragraph develop one main point. More precise referencing—for example, stating exactly what “there” refers to—would also improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for the situation, including “career ladder,” “highly qualified,” “cooperative,” and “virtual meeting.” These choices communicate your interest and proposed arrangements. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “intend you,” “move career ladder,” and “balance between two different work places.” Spelling errors, including “convinent,” “conatct,” “recommmended,” and “look forword,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for conventional professional expressions and check spelling carefully; this will make your meaning more precise and your tone more appropriate for a letter to a manager.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional structure in “if I get a chance to work with them then I can learn.” The main message is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems remain. For example, “this a great opportunity” is missing a verb, and “I will complete my project and do my work from home . which will help” incorrectly separates a dependent clause into a fragment. Capitalisation and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “So, At last.” Review articles and verb forms, and divide long or joined ideas into complete sentences. More accurate control of these patterns would make the letter easier to read.

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