Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear James,

I hope everything is going well. I am writing this letter to let you know that I am moving to France for six months. As you know, my elder sister is living their she invited me for her son's birthday.

I am going there for six months and I would like to express my interest of doing work in our head office which is in Paris. I want to work there because I am working on our marketing project with head offices' manager, Raquel. Sometimes it's difficult for me to do it virtually. I would love to do this in person, in that way I can learn a lot from her.

I am done with all my other projects at our office with the help of Neil. If you have any question regarding anything you can ask him because he can handle everything after me.

I will be very appreciated if you could help me in that and ask Raquel if she doesn't have any issue with that. While in Paris, you can contact me anytime I will always be present for you.

Regards,

Sukh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you explain your interest in the Paris head office, describe how Neil could cover your other projects, and ask James to help coordinate with Raquel. The reason for wanting to work there is relevant and specific: collaborating in person on the marketing project could help you learn from her. However, the opening focuses on moving to France for your sister’s son’s birthday, which makes the six-month work arrangement sound partly like a personal visit rather than a clearly planned professional placement. The handover is also asserted rather than explained in detail. Clarify your proposed dates and responsibilities, and make the professional purpose and practical arrangement more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall sequence: it introduces the move, explains the work-related motivation, describes cover for your projects, and ends with a request. Paragraphing helps distinguish these points, and phrases such as “because” and “If you have any question” show attempts to connect ideas. Some links are less clear or feel abrupt, particularly the shift from your sister’s birthday to the head-office request, and “I am done with all my other projects” does not clearly connect to how work will continue during your absence. The closing also combines the request and availability in a slightly crowded way. Use clearer transitions and explain the relationship between your temporary move, the Paris placement, and Neil’s cover.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main purpose, including relevant workplace terms such as “marketing project,” “head office,” and “virtually.” There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “do this in person” and “handle everything.” However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, including “express my interest of doing work,” “their” for a place, and “I will be very appreciated.” These do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but they reduce precision and naturalness. Aim for standard professional expressions and check spelling and word forms; for example, use “there” and “I would greatly appreciate your help.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple sentences and longer structures, including subordinate clauses with “because” and “if,” so the message is not limited to basic sentence patterns. Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. For example, “my elder sister is living their she invited me” joins two clauses without suitable punctuation, and “I am done with all my other projects” is not a clear tense choice for explaining future cover. In “if you have any question,” the noun should be plural, and the final sentence would benefit from clearer clause boundaries. Review punctuation in longer sentences, tense choices for planned arrangements, and agreement and article use to make the letter more controlled.

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