Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir, Madam

I am writing to request an opportunity to work at the company's head office, which I understand is in another country. I want to learn new things and gain experience in the main office, which I think will be very beneficial for me in the future, and I will become more responsible in learning about diversity in another country, meeting new people with different ethnicities and race, and learn from them.

i would be very thankful to you if you could arrange this for me, as i beleive i would never disaapoint my company or you .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You make a relevant request and give a reason for wanting the placement: learning new things, gaining experience, and meeting people from different backgrounds. However, the response addresses the task only partially. It does not explain how your current work could be managed while you are abroad, and the request for your manager’s help is brief rather than specific. The reasons are also under-developed; for example, you could explain what skills or knowledge you hope to bring back to the company. The response is substantially below the required 150 words, which limits how fully you can cover the three bullet points. Develop each point with practical details, especially a proposed handover or remote-work arrangement, and close with a clear request for a meeting or assistance.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The purpose is apparent from the opening, and the ideas follow a basic sequence: you state your request, give reasons, and then ask for help. This provides some organisation, but the letter is very brief and presented as one continuous block, so the points are not clearly separated or developed. The long sentence beginning “I want to learn new things” combines several reasons without showing how they relate, while “i would be very thankful” moves directly to the request without a transition or a clear closing. Use separate paragraphs for your purpose, reasons and work arrangements, then the request. Linking phrases such as “In addition” or “To ensure continuity” would help make the progression clearer and less abrupt.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the basic purpose, including “gain experience,” “beneficial,” and “diversity.” These choices show some range beyond very basic wording. However, several expressions are vague or unnatural for a formal workplace letter, such as “learn new things,” “different ethnicities and race,” and “I would never disappoint my company or you.” There are also spelling errors in “beleive” and “disaapoint,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise professional language, for example, describing the skills you hope to develop or the contribution you could make after returning. Check spelling carefully and choose natural collocations so your meaning sounds confident and appropriate to your manager.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of sentence forms, including a relative clause in “the company’s head office, which I understand is in another country” and a conditional request with “if you could arrange this for me.” The main message remains understandable. However, the response relies heavily on one long sentence joined by “and,” making the structure difficult to control. In “I will become more responsible in learning,” the grammatical relationship between “responsible” and “learning” is unclear, and “meeting … and learn” does not maintain a consistent verb form. Capitalise “I” throughout, and use full stops to separate complete ideas. Shorter, well-formed sentences alongside a few controlled complex structures would improve clarity and accuracy.

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