Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

I am writing to inform you that I have been working at your company for around five years, and now I think I need more experience and training to improve my skills. I would like to work at the head office in another country so that I can apply for a higher position.

Actually, I think it's been too long since I worked there, but sometimes I still face difficulties when I talk with overseas employees because I think it is very difficult to talk with clients in other languages that I do not always speak. This is the reason I think it is a good idea to work at the head office; then I feel confident, and my language skills improve.

Furthermore, I already talk with one of my colleagues; he is willing to complete my work when I am not there, or in case he does not understand anything or faces problems doing the work, she can call me anytime. I am willing to help her so that we are not behind in achieving our target.

I would really appreciate your help if you talk with the president regarding my training because working at the head office helps me to achieve my dream.

Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

Sargun

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points and give a clear reason for the transfer: gaining experience, training and language confidence to support your career progression. You also explain how your duties could be covered by a colleague and ask your manager to discuss the arrangement with the president. These relevant details meet the task well. However, the coverage plan is less fully explained than your reasons for going: it is not clear what work your colleague would take over or how you would stay in contact and manage responsibilities from abroad. The request could also be more specific about the manager’s role in arranging the placement. Developing these practical details would make the response more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a coherent overall structure: you introduce your request, explain your motivation, describe cover for your work, and close by asking for help. Paragraphing supports this progression, and linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “so that” help connect ideas. Some connections are less clear or feel mechanical, however. “Actually” does not clearly signal the point that follows, and “I think” is repeated several times, making the explanation less fluent. The reference to a colleague also shifts from “he” to “she,” which makes it harder to follow who will cover your duties. Use clearer transitions and consistent references, and organise the practical arrangement into a more direct sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for explaining the request, and phrases such as “overseas employees,” “language skills,” and “achieving our target” communicate relevant ideas. You also attempt some more specific workplace language, including “higher position” and “head office.” However, several choices are imprecise or repetitive: “work at the head office” and “work there” recur, while “talk with clients in other languages that I do not always speak” is awkward and unclear. “Complete my work” is also less natural for describing a colleague covering duties. Aim for more precise collocations and a wider range of expressions for professional development and temporary cover. This would improve flexibility without making the letter sound overly formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “so that,” “when,” and “in case,” and the main message remains clear. Some grammatical errors occur, but they rarely prevent understanding. For example, “I already talk with one of my colleagues; he is willing to complete my work” would be clearer with a more suitable tense and sentence connection, while “if you talk with the president” needs a more appropriate conditional form for a polite request. The shift from “he” to “she” also disrupts grammatical reference. Review tense consistency and pronoun agreement, and use a range of polite request structures. More consistently controlled complex sentences would strengthen the letter.

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