Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Mr John,

I am writing this letter to propose the opportunity of working at company's head office in Singapore for next 6 month. I believe it will be beneficial for company and advance my career.

I have been working for this company since past 10 years and I would like to learn about company's international operations and procedures to implement these various methods to advance our local branch. Working abroad will assist me to create professional relations with international teams from various nations

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The letter gives a relevant reason for the request: you want to learn about international operations and apply what you learn to the local branch. However, the response addresses only part of the task. It does not explain how your work would be managed while you are away, and it does not ask your manager for help arranging the placement. The opening also proposes the move without giving practical details or developing the benefits. Most importantly, the response is 66 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to cover all three bullet points adequately. To improve, explain a workable plan for your duties and make a clear, polite request for your manager’s support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The ideas are presented in a generally understandable order: you introduce the proposal, then explain your experience and motivation. The opening paragraph also signals the purpose of the letter clearly. However, the response ends before it develops a complete letter, so there is no progression to the practical arrangements or a closing request. The second paragraph contains several related ideas, but the connection between learning about international procedures and improving the local branch could be made more explicit. Add separate paragraphs for your reasons, how your responsibilities would be covered, and the help you need. A suitable closing would also make the letter feel complete and improve its overall organisation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of workplace vocabulary, including “head office,” “international operations,” “procedures,” and “professional relations.” These choices communicate the general purpose and show some ability to use topic-specific language. Some phrases are not natural or precise, however: “propose the opportunity of working” is awkward, and “create professional relations” is less idiomatic than a phrase such as “build professional relationships.” “Various methods” is also vague; specify the practices or processes you hope to learn. The vocabulary is adequate for the topic, but more accurate collocations and precise wording would make the request sound more professional and fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response includes both simple statements and a longer sentence with a purpose clause, as in “I would like to learn … to implement these various methods.” The main ideas remain understandable, but there are several grammatical inaccuracies. For example, “at company's head office” needs a possessive determiner, “for next 6 month” has errors in article use and number, and “since past 10 years” uses an incorrect time expression. The final sentence also lacks a full stop. Review articles, plural forms, and time expressions, and proofread punctuation. Using a few accurately controlled complex sentences to explain your work plan and request would demonstrate a broader and more reliable range.

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