Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

World is changing drastically in terms of safety standards and well beings of people. Due to the various reasons, sometimes different goverments impose strict restrictions and regulations for their citizens. In contemporary time, certain areas of the United States has imposed curfew in which people under 18 years of age cannot go outside after particular hours in night due to their safety and security. If for any unavoidable reason if they want to go anywhere in those night hours they must take an adult alongside of them. I stronly believe, if goverment has already taken important steps for protection of citizens, local people need to obey them. I will discuss about my opinion in the following paragraphs.

To start with, currently teenagers are spending a lot of time in doing night parties, drugs and sometimes they also involved in hate crimes and sexual assualts. For example, in United States itself, the crime rates of teenagers are increasing during dark hours in compared to broad daylight as they choose stay more active during nights, according to the conducted datas of the year 2022, which reduced significantly after curfew hours. If for any relevant reason goverment want them to be in home at least for certain time period, they must follow that.

In addition, night hours are for sleeping not for night outings. Dimentia, insomnia and sleep apnea in teenagers are increasing as they are not getting enough amount of sleep, which is about 8 hours. They are also taking illegal substance for getting peaceful sleep and have no clue about why it is happening. They have their own negligence toward their own health which also do adverse effect in growth of the country as country ended up spending good amount in rehabilitation centres. For instance, many videos are available in where you can see many teens are having drugs in broad daylight for a single purpose "sleep". They just bend towards taking restricted drugs rather than medical attention. By imposing curfew, goverment is actally helping them to do better.

In conclusion, US goverment has not just imposed curfew, they also gave permission to teenagers to go out with an adult in night. As a wise human being people under 18 years of age should understand it is for their own safety, security and growth.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by clearly stating a position in favor of the curfew. You provide two main arguments: crime reduction and health benefits. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat inconsistent. The link between the curfew and the specific health issues mentioned, such as 'dementia' and 'sleep apnea' in teenagers, is not logically supported and seems factually questionable in this context. While you address the prompt, the supporting evidence is occasionally tangential or lacks depth. To improve, ensure that your arguments are grounded in logical reasoning and that your examples directly support your main points rather than introducing unrelated medical conditions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, each with a central theme. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'To start with', 'In addition', and 'In conclusion', to signal the progression of your argument. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the logical connection between ideas is weak, particularly in the second body paragraph. Referencing is generally clear, but the transition between the discussion of crime and the discussion of sleep disorders is abrupt. Improving the use of linking phrases within paragraphs would help create a more natural and sophisticated flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'contemporary', 'unavoidable', 'negligence', and 'rehabilitation'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'conducted datas' (data is uncountable), 'doing night parties', and 'bend towards taking'. Additionally, there are minor spelling errors like 'goverments' and 'assualts'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band. Focusing on correct collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing will strengthen this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, they are frequently marred by grammatical errors, such as 'certain areas... has imposed' (subject-verb agreement), 'in compared to' (preposition error), and 'videos are available in where'. There are also issues with article usage and pluralization throughout the text. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall clarity. To reach a higher band, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and ensuring that complex structures are formed accurately.

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