Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In recent years, increasing number of people are using the internet and smartphone more than before. This is happening because of growing, which is offered by internet and mobiles. However, that becoming dependent on these technologies is disadvantage social decrease attention.

Nowadays, people are using new technologies like internet and cell phone, whats app. this is the modern technologies in societies. In the words, smartphone are working many places like at home for content talk and chat with friends, family members , which are living others country, others city. Moreover, easy to any type of information resources people can get information, how to business running others country, which are living others country easy to deal with business.

In my opinion people use of internet and phones is a negative development. As more people have start using their phones and internet for communication purposes. face-to-face talk with friends personal connections. For example, earlier people used to meet in person, Although, in person meetings are being replaced by virtual meetings which can have negative on mental health as well as have eye problem.

In conclusion, It has many benefits in social relationship but, it can not be negletered. people more using phone and internet have sometime face health problem.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response fails to address the prompt entirely. The task asks for an opinion on teenage curfews, but the essay discusses the impact of internet and smartphone usage. Because the response is completely off-topic and also fails the minimum word count requirement (207 words instead of 250), it cannot be awarded a passing score for task achievement. The ideas presented are irrelevant to the specific question posed, and the failure to meet the length requirement further impacts the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and often confusing. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the abrupt transition 'In the words' and the misuse of 'Although' at the start of a sentence. The lack of a clear central theme makes it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's argument, resulting in a fragmented structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There is significant repetition of basic words like 'people', 'internet', and 'phone'. Phrases such as 'content talk' and 'how to business running' are non-standard and impede clarity. The student struggles to use appropriate collocations, and the lack of variety in word choice prevents the expression of more complex ideas. The vocabulary is generally restricted to a very basic level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often obscure meaning. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'increasing number of people are using'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'This is happening because of growing, which is offered by internet and mobiles.' The lack of control over basic sentence construction and the high frequency of errors make the text difficult to read and understand.

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