Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.
What is your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In some states of USA a curfew is imposed by the government so teenagers can not go out a certain time unless they are accompanied by an adult. This is good way to protect in some situation like war to protect them. This essay would throw some light on all aspects prior to embarking y own view point.
During the wars we often see some restrictions in nations. USA is one of them who allow states to implement laws according their need. For instance, if something wrong happens in a city like murder or robbery in this kind of situation the government impose strict laws in which younger can not go out mostly in dark time. As a result, they can easily protect teenagers and can find culprits. Moreover, recently in California we saw this kind of situation where younger could go out only with parents in only emergency and people were protected by the government.
Every coin has flip side too, there are some drawbacks of this too. It can impact on children study if they keep for long time in their homes because parents do not have enough time time to drop them in their schools. Also, locking them in rooms can change their behaviour since they do not know this is for their safety.
In conclusion , although children can face some problems such as education and live alone at home. I believe that there laws are very important in emergency to protect adults and other people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt, but the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you provide a clear position, the arguments are somewhat underdeveloped. For instance, the link between curfews and 'war' is not a standard context for US teenage curfews, which are typically related to public safety or crime prevention. The example regarding California is vague and lacks specific detail. To improve, ensure your supporting points are directly relevant to the topic and provide more depth to your reasoning. The conclusion restates your position, but the overall argument could be more persuasively supported with clearer examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'In conclusion', but the transitions between sentences are sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Every coin has flip side too'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the connection between the general argument and the specific example is weak. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the progression of ideas within paragraphs is smoother and more natural.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You rely on basic phrasing, such as 'something wrong happens' and 'in dark time'. There are also some issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'younger' used as a noun to refer to teenagers, which is not standard usage. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to social policy, law enforcement, and adolescent development, and work on using words in their correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'in some states of USA'), incorrect verb forms ('government impose' instead of 'imposes'), and awkward phrasing ('if they keep for long time'). While the meaning is generally understandable, these recurring errors in basic grammar and punctuation prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will significantly improve your accuracy.
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