Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In some part of United States curfew is imposed on youngsters, this requires them to be at home for certain time at night hours unless they are accompanied by adults. I believe this is wise decision made by the authorities for various reasons. Protecting from Crime activities and safeguarding

To commence with, the primary reason why certain law imposed on teenager in the America is to reduce the crimes activities and protect the innocents. Because these age groups are highly vulnerable to risks than the adults due to peer pressure and unethical activities. Furthermore, their mind is not certainly developed to justify good and bad. For example, many articles published in the year 2020, revealed that 87% of criminal activities like robbery, stabbing took place in Florida was conducted by the youngsters. Moreover, proposing such laws would extremely useful to the parents in terms of controlling their children’s using the laws and also this establishment allows other innocents to safeguard them selfs not to become a victims.

Similarly, imposing such laws might stops colossal road accidents since these younger drive during the night hours and end many innocent life in drink and drive case without the driver licence and any adults assistance.

Nevertheless, others school of thought feels that such rules can limit the personal freedom and they would always grow depending on their parents. Since some tender get used to their parents company and they might not go out during the day as well. Moreover, they feel like someone is controlling their personal freedom. Although, younger one have a few difficulties imposing such rules but they would help many to safeguard and learn displine

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. You have provided relevant reasons, such as crime reduction and road safety, and supported them with examples. However, the development is somewhat uneven. The introduction is fragmented and lacks a complete thesis statement, and the conclusion is abrupt, ending mid-sentence. To reach a higher band, ensure that your introduction clearly outlines your stance and that your conclusion provides a cohesive summary of your main points. The ideas are relevant, but the depth of analysis could be improved by avoiding over-generalizations and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, fully developed focus.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices like 'To commence with', 'Furthermore', and 'Nevertheless' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate. For instance, the transition between the introduction and the first body paragraph is disjointed due to the incomplete sentence at the end of the intro. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'some tender get used to', which is grammatically confusing. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'vulnerable', 'safeguard', and 'colossal'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'criminal activities like robbery, stabbing took place in Florida was conducted by the youngsters' and 'end many innocent life'. These errors occasionally make the meaning slightly less precise. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensure you are using words in the correct context. While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, the inaccuracies prevent a higher score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some law imposed', 'younger drive'), article usage (e.g., 'In some part of United States'), and pluralization (e.g., 'many innocent life'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the incomplete final sentence. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors is noticeable. To progress, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your sentences are complete and grammatically sound.

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