Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Curfew is a shutdown situation. In few cities of US, at night after fixed time the curfew is applied. In this situation the youngsters are not allowed to go out unless they are going with the adults. In my opinion. The impending composition will discuss why I think the following trend is constructive.

To begin with numerous reasons are involved behind my thinking from which increasing rate of crime is the first. As nowadays the rate of crime has rapidly increased in whole world, especially at night. Everyone avoids to travel at night these days because of the crimes. Parents do not let their kids go out alone at the night due safety.Also, there are specifically some areas which are not safe due large number of drugies, and homeless. Furthermore, bullying can be considered as the second notion. When a group of teenagers go together out, there is a lot of bullying, fighting, screaming and even they fight with each other. Suddenly, at night all these things increases and creates a lot of problems as recently there was a case in Canada where two youngsters started an arguement and were beating each other badly that one guy has to be taken to the hospital.Also these shouting creates the problem to the neighbourhood as well. So, parents always choose to go with the teenagers.

Moreover, drugs can be considered as the third reason. As we all are aware that there is a sudden rise in the number of drug consumers and those people gets violent at night if they see anyone around them. Also government and parents are scared that drugies can even force someone to consume the drugs or can misbehave with them. Also all of them are on roads at night at the specific locations, so most of people avoid visiting to those places at night. Recently a news came out that two drug addicts were joking with each other and had an argument over something and were left with shooting on each other in which a random 23 year girl crossing the road was killed.

To conclude it, this is initiative taken by the government to protect the teenagers from mishappenings. I believe that this is a positive step towards improving the future and government should take some actions towards the increasing rate of crime.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by clearly stating a position in favor of curfews. You provide three main reasons: crime rates, bullying, and drug-related violence. While the ideas are relevant, the development is somewhat uneven. The examples provided, such as the incident in Canada or the shooting of the girl, are specific but feel slightly anecdotal rather than analytical. To reach a higher band, ensure that your arguments focus more on the societal implications of the curfew rather than just listing negative events. The position is consistent throughout, and the conclusion effectively summarizes your stance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use transition words like 'To begin with,' 'Furthermore,' and 'Moreover' to signal new points. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive. For instance, the phrase 'Also' is used frequently at the start of sentences, which disrupts the flow. Additionally, some referencing is slightly unclear, such as 'this is initiative' in the conclusion, which lacks a clear antecedent. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your ideas, but there are several instances of non-standard word choices and inaccuracies. For example, 'drugies' is informal and 'mishappenings' is not standard English. You also use 'joking' when you likely meant 'arguing' or 'fighting' in the context of the shooting incident. While your meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the use of informal register prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on learning more formal collocations and avoiding colloquial or invented terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow, such as 'everyone avoids to travel' (should be 'avoids traveling'), 'these shouting creates' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'those people gets violent' (should be 'get'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after commas and periods. While you attempt complex sentences, the frequency of basic errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage suggests that you need to focus on proofreading and mastering fundamental grammatical rules to improve your accuracy.

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