Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In certain areas of the USA, curfew plays a pivotal role in order to improve the safety of teenagers and preventing them to go outside during night time if they are not accompanied by an elder. I partially agree with the given statement, as curfew act as a key factor for restricting youngsters to commit crime, whereas other measures are needed along with curfew to reduce such incidents and make neighbourhoods safer.

One major advantage of the curfew is it improve the safety teenagers, because they are more vulnerable to accidents, crime and other dangerous situations if they are not occupied by an adults during night time. A fix curfew will reduce their time spending with friends during late night and their parents can freely allows them to handout with their bosom buddies during evening without any restriction for a fix duration. For example, research shows that, after curfew law, a number of areas in the USA, ratio of crime is decreased and the local community are willing to encourage their children for outdoor activities and keep eyes on them during night time for preventing them to go in a wrong hand and spoil their career by attempting offence or crime.

However, strict curfew regulations have its own disadvantages. Such as, it can discouraging children to freely develop essential skills due to lake of opportunities. Apart from that, allocating police security in the dangerous zones will significantly improve the safety of local community. Therefore, higher authorities don't need to implement curfew rules in all over the country. Additionally, involving teenagers in the educational activities make them busy and proper guidance from teachers and parents will dwindling the chances of young offences, thefts and crimes in the society, which enhancing their overall growth and better for their successful career.

In conclusion, along with curfew legislation, proving security in dangerous areas and giving plenty of academic tasks to youngsters play a important role for improving their safety and reduce the risk of youth's crime in the society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all parts of the prompt by providing a clear position and supporting it with relevant arguments. Your ideas are generally well-developed, such as the discussion on safety and the alternative suggestion of educational activities. However, some points could be more fully extended; for instance, the link between 'bosom buddies' and the curfew is slightly unclear. The response maintains a consistent position throughout, which is a strength. To reach a higher band, ensure that every supporting example directly reinforces your main argument without drifting into slightly tangential points about career development.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each with a central theme. You use a range of cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Apart from that', and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are instances where referencing is a bit unclear, such as the phrase 'such as' starting a sentence, which is grammatically incomplete. The progression of ideas is generally smooth, but the flow could be improved by using more sophisticated linking phrases rather than relying on simple sentence starters.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including some attempts at less common items like 'pivotal role' and 'vulnerable'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'occupied by an adults' (should be 'accompanied by adults'), 'lake of opportunities' (lack), and 'young offences' (juvenile delinquency). The phrase 'bosom buddies' is also somewhat informal for an academic essay. While your meaning is always clear, these inaccuracies prevent a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this level. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage, such as 'it improve the safety' (it improves), 'parents can freely allows' (allow), and 'dwindling the chances' (will dwindle). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor errors in sentence construction that occasionally distract the reader. To improve, focus on ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that complex structures are formed accurately.

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