Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.
What is your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In the United State of America declared lockdown in some places and the law and enforcement published that younger people are not allowed to be out doors and after sunset if they want to go outside, everytime an adult needs to be present beside them. In my opinion, I am not agree with this. In this essay I will discuss my point of view and relevant reasons for this.
The USA is very developed country. Every state has good and reputed police force that protect the USA even after the sunset. In some places of the USA government declared law regarding younger children that they are not allowed to go out side without an adult. In some area of the safety it is good decision such as stabbing, robery and kidnapping. It is true that in major develop countries has high number of crimes. To protect every child life the decision of lockdown on youngers after sunset it is a good cause.
However, 96% of the youngers are attending schools everyday because of the schools they are going to bed early as a result they do not have time to go outside after having a dinner or sunset. In addition, parents are also strict towards their children that they do not roaming outside till late night without their permission. Also children can provide live location through their phone to parents so parents are able to watch their live activity in real-time.
In conclusion, In some cases I am agree on this lockdown where after a sunset youngers are not allowed to go outside without an adult because of their safety while sense of freedom is the key for youngers and by exploring they can increase their general knowledge. In some cases parents needs to be strict to their childrens if they want to go outside they need to provide live location to their parents so they can track and see the live activity of their children.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the curfew policy and providing a personal opinion. However, the position is somewhat inconsistent; while the introduction states the writer is 'not agree', the conclusion suggests a more nuanced view, agreeing with the policy in some cases. The ideas are relevant but lack depth. For instance, the argument about school attendance and parental monitoring is presented, but it is not clearly linked to why a curfew might be unnecessary or redundant. To improve, ensure your position is clearly defined and maintained throughout the essay, and provide more detailed explanations for your supporting points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the transition 'In some area of the safety' is awkward and does not effectively link the ideas. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the phrase 'because of the schools they are going to bed early', which lacks a logical connection. While there is an overall progression, the flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by grammatical issues and awkward phrasing, which hinders the logical development of the argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'younger children' (when referring to teenagers), 'major develop countries' (should be 'developed'), and 'stabbing, robery and kidnapping' (which are nouns, not areas of safety). The phrase 'everytime an adult needs to be present' is also imprecise. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology and improving your control over word forms and collocations. The current range is adequate for basic communication but lacks the flexibility required for higher scores.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('I am not agree', 'parents needs to be strict'), article usage ('In the United State of America'), and sentence structure ('In some cases I am agree on this lockdown where after a sunset youngers are not allowed...'). While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often poorly constructed or contain errors. The majority of the sentences are simple or contain basic errors, which limits the range of structures demonstrated. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be beneficial.
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