Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.
What is your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, crime and debated atmosphere increase at night time in US. Mean while some people argued that, teenagers may not go outside of house as specially at night time as they are with an adult. This essay will discuss both views as far as i am concerned i am in favour of with the adolescent should stay safe at night time in their house.
To commence with, most of the downtown cores of city in US held a massive curfew by people such as homeless and drogue. To explain it, because of lot of drinking alcohol and weed, smock they lose their consciousness, they really do not have any idea what they are doing, people walk front of the car on the road.Moreover, there are chances to hurt a teenager if they are not with their parents.For instance, In news of NYC - a newz channel of new york city ,a survey mention that ration of injured adolescent at night in new york city is increasing day by day.As a result it is prove that all teens need to stay safe at night time at home with their adults.
one the other hand, some of the areas of city which are so quite and safe with good protection from police officers. In other words, by high security of peace office in transit, house, all private property some teens feel safer because of them and they can go every where at night time.To cite an example, In a article mention that in city of calgary there are a zero chances of curfew due to police at night time is very huge team. Hence, may teenager freely walk at all corners instead of staying at home.
In conclusion, although at curfew time in some city feels safe some are not yet, i firmly believe that teenager should not take a risk to go out without their parents at night time.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding curfews for teenagers by presenting an opinion and supporting ideas, though the argument is somewhat confused by phrasing. In the introduction, the writer states, 'this essay will discuss both views as far as i am concerned i am in favour of,' which conflates a discussion essay format with a direct opinion response. The body paragraphs attempt to provide reasons, such as public safety concerns involving homeless individuals and substance abuse, and counter-arguments regarding well-policed areas like Calgary. However, the supporting examples lack clarity and rely on vague generalisations, such as 'In news of NYC - a newz channel of new york city, a survey mention that ration of injured adolescent.' While all parts of the task are addressed, the ideas are under-developed and lack clear logical support, placing the response firmly at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into four paragraphs, showing an attempt at a standard essay structure with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, overall progression is hindered by awkward transitions and repetitive sentence structures. Cohesive devices are frequently misused or overly mechanical, such as 'To commence with,' 'To explain it,' and 'one the other hand.' Paragraphing is used to separate main points, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak due to disjointed sentences and unclear referencing, particularly in sentences like 'As a result it is prove that all teens need to stay safe at night time at home with their adults.' These issues reflect the characteristics of Band 5, where organisation is present, but progression lacks clarity and cohesion is frequently faulty or inadequate.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice, spelling, and collocation that occasionally impede communication. Examples of inaccurate lexical choices include 'debated atmosphere' instead of tense atmosphere, 'drogue' instead of drug users, 'smock' instead of smoke, and 'peace office' instead of police officer. The writer also struggles with basic collocations, writing 'zero chances of curfew' and 'ration of injured adolescent' instead of proportion or rate. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a basic topic-related meaning, the numerous inaccuracies in spelling and word choice keep the lexical score at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. Grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('downtown cores of city... held a massive curfew'), tense inconsistencies ('it is prove that'), and missing articles or prepositions ('in city of calgary'). Punctuation is also problematic, with incorrect capitalization and spacing around commas and periods. Because complex structures are frequently inaccurate and frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, this performance corresponds to a Band 5.0 for grammatical range and accuracy.
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